you lost me with the first line. your rhymes are stetched. your metaphors are exhausted.

what an imagination you have

yes. nicely woven. "mite" should be "might" in S1, otherwise, very pleasing.

There are some brilliant images in here, not all of them go together, but sod it, who cares? Good stuff. 9

it was ok...no strong feelings though

blah blah blah bitch bitch bitch

what were you thinking when you posted this? wow it spins fast, you sure are deep.

When i read this i initially thought of the ufo crash in roswell nm. there was metal debris that acted like aluminun that could straighten itself back out after you crumpled it up... i enjoy that image some how, and the others you have presenred along with it. have an 8.

i have never met a snake that stole anything except for maybe a mouse's life. Perhaps you should just get the fucke out of the garden and call it a day. And by the way give me back my rib bitche or start paying rent on it. Years of bad cooking and boring sexual positions, and you're still not happy with my total ruinment (new worde)? tsk. Women... the nerve.

Wankers of the world unite! And lets have the porn

For 40K or for love I can, but for a pink bunny, I can't. Have you ever thought about a mail order bride? Yes.

Ahhhh.....you took a line from a Lil' Kim song. You should try doing the Hungarian alphabet while you're at it.

Um....intersting.

nice....lol....very nice

Hi, 1 spelling error 'schizophrenic' I liked the beginning, and understand now why you liked Parting th Curtain, I didn't find the connection, or else you took a sharp turn, at His Momma.... nice though. I really liked the beginning.

I love that last line.

P&K there is absolutly nothing wrong with being either young or British. Caducus there is some good stuff in this poem but it just doesn't tickle my fancy. -6-

How do you achieve the world?

lovely.

Nice