INTRANSIT
on The Blooding by Mr Pig
12 Feb 2003, 8:46 AM
good. rude. good n rude.
golly, mister
nicely put sentiments
in parts sublimely told, in other parts (middle) you digress too much and lose the point -7-
unfortunately due to salary cap restrictions, the cather was traded to the corn. i'd like to say thank you to all those fans out that stuck with me and wish me luck with me new team...
too bad all i had was an extension cord left over from finally taking down my christmas lights
A man with an arse?
Goddamm those scientists
cliche
hearts clot. brains grow senial. tough choice.
sex sells for about $100 per hand job...least thats what i start at.
"So all I do is cry now,
For I belong to a hell called yesterday."
now that is the best thing I'VE read all day
i would change the title before you get fucked with by many a different ranker...oh, and maybe destroy the poem before they see it as well.
you would never know this if i dont say it so i will.
In our writing group you are envied and revered with admiration and respect so keep buying pens and write you are consistent and truly gifted, my brother caducus thinks you are the best on this site, i think your the 2nd after gods wife. ----10
your intro's are always your strongest asset, the last Stan seems rushed which is a shame for otherwise its a strong piece of lit....7
I thought you were handsome pete returned.
Your not
Different I quite liked it.
Both are rather sticky but toffee is better, with sex you have the argument over who sleeps in the wet patch ..7
At last we meet sir I have read your work and like your sensitive pieces best, sarcasm is inferior to you only entertain it when the devil on your shoulder sits on its chip and teases the Angel for being so tedious.
By the way this is a keeper my young fry.....8
If pens had feelings they would cry ink for hours over this.
Use your imagination....4 lashes for you now stiffen those knees.