poemwanker
on some deleted poem
17 Jan 2003, 11:47 AM
Yep
you've misclassified this as a limerick.
excellent. nicely done.
again, line lengths disrupt what the rhythm should be.
I think this is better than the original.
as i knotted his noose
(simply becasue he couldn't scream and dangle) otherwise, I like this! a valiant job. 9.
get rid of "who" in the first one,
and th elast one, while the premise is good, doesn't seem to flow as well as the others. overall, an 8
cute.
veyr nice. been here for a while, still good!
Heark yourself.
nork - the capital nof new jersey, right?
Poo.
Robert K Foster
on OK, I apologize - it's steaming shite and no mistake, but it was the best I could come up with on the spur of the moment. I'm off to slit my wrists now, since writer's block has sent me spiralling into the depths of the deepest depression in human history... by Yardbird
17 Jan 2003, 11:38 AM
I hope you don't hurt yourself. It isn't the right thing to do. I like this limerick lots and lots and I hope you stick around and write more.
Anyone in particular?
I'm going to bend you over and beat you like a bad monkey. 0
Now this one I like.
Oh, and I'll be a really bad bitch for you tonight *wink*