Show, don't tell. Show.

omg awww dat was so good i love it mami i can so rel8 2 wat u feel

I have caused 2 people to have to go to Anger Management, 1 to change school in disgrace and 1 grade 8 teacher to only teach kindergarten.

Neat. But were you at least wearing a vest of human skin at the time? Spankings $20.

Mighty good.

This one has no man kissing, masturbation or huge ascii art of anything amusing. 8.

Dogshit ! but its so bad it has a place here and your user name is very nice so i'm giving you 10 for that and 0 for the poem = 5, may the lordy bless you and bathe you till you choke on poetry, ( maximum respect though dude I dig you man

better now s3 is sorted here is your fat lady .....8

hmmmm, worryingly committed to poetry

You have exploded my head, now i must find my brain, when I am enlightened I shall vote .

Nice arrow, does the arrow have a point?

Of course it does, it literally does not

Four flies on grey velvet -7

Its a shame no-one read this it deserved some critique. I enjoyed this but my interest started waning on the last 2 stanzas, its a good poem otherwise, why not re submit? heres a 6

jesu help us all.

there really is little that can be said...

No, babe, we end when i detonate the tiny neutron bomb i installed in my clit ring (you thought it was a ruby). The pain will be short yet intense but think of the outline we'll burn into the wall... 2.

A dictionary may help you spell, learning about how well of you really are in the world will help put you in perspective and only Lord Satan will help you to stop being a whiny, self-pitying bratling.

groove. in the heart and the poem.

Dear god.