little_angel_maria
on Masculine by temptalia
2 Jan 2003, 4:47 PM
this is really good have a 10
to hard a try at similie in those first few lines. good thought, but you've grown since you wrote it, so why not revise?
Reminds me of a day...
kool
Wow! I really like this one!!!
If this is your writing getting worse, show me some of your best.
We give him all the help that we can. They're called 'tranquilisers'.
yes. i do. this is a great and grand poem. golden que tip. 10.
and whoever gavev this a zero, shouuld immeiately go wash their mouth out with soup, that's right...i said soup. motherfucker, sorry for the french, but this poem does not deserve a zero, or anything less than a six, and i'll prove that. watch.a
Did you eve see my "Morning conflict"? If not, tell me and I'll repost. I don't know what to do with this piece. Feels just short, for some reason.
When your ego takes a beating there is nothing like going to the gym twice, having 3 Diet Black Cherry Shastas, dancing like a fool to Pour Some Sugar on Me, potentially going to India for 6 months, having a cool ass roomate move in on Sunday.....and just fucking looking in the mirror and saying God Damn I'm great......ahhhhhhh.
Only 10 minutes??? I hate you! This is really good, and thought provoking. Although...kinda odd something like this would come to you...where??? =-P
You are like the fat couple from Keeping Up Appearances...I love that show...it's on PBS. Your poem is god but do you write about anything other than girls?
I like rough hands, especially if they have calluses. Ahh there is nothing like the touch of a rough hand. Thin lips..ughhhhh...how about chapped lips from being out all day in the field?
Har har har! Have a ten, you continue to amuse me, Dark Angel...just one question-who's Ironshoe in reality?
Yes, wonderful news.
Hee ho hum...marvellous...you are a comic genius, goodbye
Killer draft,man. Sorry, I have no clue what epi.... what the hell was that again?