-=SeTTle=-
on The spleenless poet by Bachus
30 Dec 2002, 4:23 PM
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This is beautiful...Thank you Settle for thinking of me!...10
I think the title is mis-leading, this has nothing to do with the relationship between the man and the fish. Find another title. Is this about being a provider, or is this about the freedoms of simplicity?
How does light fall less on deaf ears than on the ears of the hearing? You seem like a passionate person, always necessary for a poet, but your poem is too much about what you feel, and too little about what happened. Life is a confusing and difficult thing, except of course those secret moments. What has your sub-conscience created? By the way, I think it's a bad idea to place a line break after 'sub'. How about just 'This light that brakes through the bitter black, is my only compass'?
you've described the Ted Kazinsky...it's a good poem but I feel as though something is missing...describe him more.
Describe the forest, describe the light....is the forrest dense? is the light bright?...etc.
Your name really scares me Bob Jim...serial killer meets a mullet sporting trucker and you get Bob Jim....so you like Slim Jims?....you had to stretch out the ass with something tiny first, that's why I asked.
Could you stop wasting my time with implications of beastiality? First kiddie porn now this....god i hope you don't have any animals near you...poor things.
Your body unaware of its sex...doesn't sound right? It's almost like you're questioning wether you are a hemaphrodite. Also, of dolphins and speaking whales...if you're describing the whales then you should describe the dolphins as well.
Don't worry, it's crappy
I HATE YOU ALL!! DIE! DIE! DIE BITCHES!! BEND OVER!! GO FUCK YOURSELVES IN THE ARSES!! YEA! DO IT!!
Read my poems!
They're better than the crap you write!
(That means all of you fuckwits)
I don't like this as much as your other stuff. I know I joke around with you a bit about being a truck driver, but I really do like your poems. This one though...it doesn't seem like you know what you're talking about....6
purity at it's finest, almost too pure maybe..it needs a little more line, but barely.
Wow...amazing. You have some major talent my NC comrade...10. BRAVO...two consecutive 10 for you. What do you do?
BASTERDS! BE OFFENDED! I'M NOT JOKING! I REALLY HATE YOU! DIE! DIE! DIE! (I feel really stressed now, time to relax with some kiddies and 'Spot')
Well, you have certainly written an original poem though, after reading it twice, I am unsure as to your intent and meaning. It is an interesting poem and I will wait until I have time to read it again before giving it a rating.
thanks settle. i couldn't of said it better myself. i owe you one.
SIC SHIT! SIC!??
I don't think I can top this.??