ok, so besides seeing a bad movie, what happened here?

either you've done something here or I have an easy minds eye.

I agree w/ him, and sighed at everything except the very last line, which made teh poem cheaper somehow. Not the sentiment expressed, but the wording. thus, nine.

Looks good to me.

tron and birdes are fun and beys? well what can i says? they are always fabulous with portebellos and bacon.b

okay.a

how did you know i was wearing orange? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! the curtains...ah!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

i would end after ejaculated, dal.n

lovely..all of the good nouns are simply symbolic.

the best part was the snog, and than you went no where with it...shame really.

compared to george clooney in solaris, this moves well. as far as electrons go the probability is limitless.

Hmmm... how many times did I comment on the original fifteen versions of this again? It's much clearer than some of the drafts, but I think it might have lost some of its punch, especially in the last two stanzas. I still think that the 'Wait/It was not as bad' part worked better when it was broken in three or four lines. Still, it's good.

Bravo. You know the works well.

thank god the title isn't better than the haiku, and i thought he did already. they shold have a mutton burger called the mcbleet. the second line is humorous. what kind of vreature is the grimace? exactly.r

hoad up yo. is it a dinosaur, or an insect? cause weren't dinosaurs notoriously ornithopods?

NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! how will i raise the twins?e

Meraviglioso, la musica de le tue parole al fine.

Snails are interesting. One should try them at least once in one's life. But I confess one couldn't take too much at a time. Sort of like snake.

possibly, holding more meaning than an incubus song.d

more contemporary prattle.