Boobalicious!

Very good, in fact its bad (in true gansta style).

I think you mean "fear is a desert," not a crepe suzette. I don't mock--I once wrote "draught holds the memory of water." (Which it surely does, but that wasn't the point.)

I'd like this if only because you used "crenellated" without using "battlements"--but I like it for a lot of other reasons. Lovely sustained imagery. Stanza three--think it'd be stronger if you ended on "threaded [with?] the colors of the morn" and dropped the next line.

Those who abhor slavery, are themselves slaves to their own ignorance. Lev 15:6

Dear God. Please, please, PLEASE tell me the spelling mistakes were on purpose. PLEASE.

anyone that can sit and find an opinion on that many differentiating labels deserves atleast an 8. whether i agree with what was contrasted or not.

When I was your age I wrote in a similar style to you. I put the emphasis on rhyme rather than substance or style, your writing will mature and you wont recognize how your styles changed till 1 day you'll look over what you've written and say unto yourself 'Did I write this'?, the best advice is dont chuck anything away you may use two choice lines in a better poem, Rebecca Calvetti gave you a constructive piece of criticism, and you can still keep your individuality yet take advice on board - some good lines/bad lines here, just keep trying -5-

Excellent, it reminds me of...I won't go into it, too many supressed memories. ('Fat festish cleverdevice!')

I love the irony at the end of this it had me panting like Lassie being boned by beethoven, what i like even more though is the fact that the 'phantom' 1 voter has yet to serve up their cowardly custard and say to everyone 'I'm desperate to be loved but y'all hate my poems so I'm gonna hate yours, heres a deserved 9 to balance the books.

whats cleo's number horus?

The goose has layed a golden egg ! Well done indeed BUT......... check line 6, its cower you want now cow, or it sounds like line dancing for cows.

A bit too syrupy for me, but for your romantic self kiss a 6

A poets name, a poets poem what more can i add ===========9=====

Intelligent idea here which you've dealt with well, I liked the way you sold fragility here and the end stanza and last line hit the throat - nice one *8* (try and shorten the line about the wet earth it affects the readability)

Haven't read an ode on here for ages, this aint bad really heres a 7

this is beautiful. but, in the third stanza, you say we sing, then in the single line (s4?) you say that you are mute. you keep crossing the line/confusing solitary (i, them) and together (we). if you worked this out, this would be near perfect. nice job.

you,ve remebered an awful lot for someone who has forgotten. nice job.

I think I was there, I grabbed your cock, rememver, that tall muscular 'girl'!

wonderful...9