cleverdevice
on some deleted poem
2 Dec 2002, 3:03 AM
Ohhhh, shivers up my spine.
What does it reflect though?
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
2 Dec 2002, 5:01 AM
Is this a follow up to my 'bathroom products for breakfast' or something?
To fill the gap before I get round to 'kitchen utensils for lunch' perhaps
Crap
Crap
It is a bit too long lengthwise, but kinda good. What twat came on here and gave this a two? Someone's done that to mine-I think there's a conspiracy
HAAHAAHAA!!!
Who was P&K referring to when he told whoever it was to turn off the BBC? Was it me or Red Neck. It was probably me. Does this mean we're not allowed opinions? Please educate me in America's purposes in their actions in the Middle East. I really need to know just why I sound like a dork.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
2 Dec 2002, 4:28 AM
Welsh squelch is a nice rhyme.
Even better than the first
This would make the lady in the lake wet, very good, more of a short story than a poem. *8*
The text doewsnt justify the title enough, I had no empathy for the character. Try and tell a story less predictably, give us the fear, make it more tangible, as it stands it leaves me barren of any feeling or reaction, go for it keep on trying. (will vote on a re edit)
excellent, and you will annoy people further with the Robert De Niro reference no doubt.
no
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
2 Dec 2002, 5:02 AM
I know the feeling, Jake, I really do
V.good