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on some deleted poem
28 Nov 2002, 11:59 PM
tender.
now why didn't your army of anonimi vote this one up the ladder?
what's a girl to say?
well, i'd like to thank p&k and horus8, for keeping it real, and -=Dark_Angel=-, for keeping it fake, and INTRANSIT, for hanging in there, and let's not forget christof, off in the wilds down south, we still love you, man...and frass, where the hell'd you go?, and the dearly departed mrs.g--it's just not the same without you babe...and the ever-changing but always constant doylum, my fav pervert on the site... i couldn't have done it without all of you...and to kiki, for all that peperoni...
oh yeah, and all you canadians out there--you know who you are!
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damn straight. 8
this has promise, but you use the words without fully understanding them, and you also lose the rhythm in several places. you have subbed it several times, i see, so i know you are really interested in getting it seen... consider these things...the preciseness of meaning, and the flow. this will be much better with a little work.
oh speedy d, glad to see you haven't lost your subtle touch. have a 3, with love from my mom
" like it. it's very threating?" in fact it helps me threat my way to work in the morning....you are a bunch of fucking morons, and you can take that and go threat yourselfs...fuckin idiots...jesus christ...sometimes i wonder?
i look in the mirror and say why ...oh why sweet lord? why be i a pig? was it the fig of mighty jesu? nay nay it was the pomagranite of pie filling splendor. boink boink, thanks for the pie slice mr. garcia...now i feel as though i also have a spirating dick of pointless druelerings....blah!
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
29 Nov 2002, 1:11 AM
Hah hah hah.We all know it's you eskimo, piss off back to the north pole and stop pretending to be a redneck.
i also enjoy being off to the left way up high on the best list...it's the 'best' thing that's ever happened to me...i'll be back later to deliver a speech and pick up my award (not a golden q-tip award, mind you ..but close) i will also be bringing my turntable's and my band to perform my new song called the sooez canal, aka the little vagineer that could....it's going to be a hell of a show! i'm bringing my possie and my homies..i'd like to take a moment to thank everyone here for taking me to "#1 off to the left of the list". i promise i wont let you guys down..peace out.e
Not bad, but somehow I wanted it to rhyme. The fourth line should be
"Black nails on my fist". but thats just me. I like the "Just choke" part.
And the title is good.
Really like the ending.
But I'm not sure what its about.
Well sir, I like it. I certainly do.
cool.
I like it.It is very...threating.
why don't you write in plain english? writing using this shorthand doesn't seem to be adding anything to your message. am i missing something?
this poem reads like He-man talked when battling against the mighty power of Greyskull.
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