Ranger
on some deleted poem
26 Nov 2002, 6:22 AM
OUT! Love-Fifteen!
Not a bad 'ad break' read *6*
jesu christu! make the ganglia twitch!
beneath that sultry exterior, the slowed beat of an icy heart...
nice rewrite, dewd.
Bollocks to her age let it go !
this poem is timeless, but Ms Calvetti (sounds like a tennis player) if you are lying about your age Bachus will get the secret agent smurf to find out
here a 7 for being so cult about the occult
This was like fucking the ice queen from narnia (Cool as a fuck) so take this fat lady and give her a hug *8* BINGO.
For some reason I didn't see this up until now. You win the prize. Vore and fisting are two of the greatest sexual deviances of all time, although Roman Showers are a bit sick. HA HA HA
I always find it difficult to rate your work as your obviously a hopeless romantic, who writes unchallenging, simple writings. I'm giving you a 6 on this because their is a purity to your work. However I have to criticize you on one aspect and that is the lack of originality in your work, it is a very basic 'greeting card' style with little fibre and alluring qualities.
Fair play to you though, none of us here are Hemingway at the moment, just lose yourself more in your imagination and you'll find more satisfaction in your creativity.
The point of love is the 'falling' as it grounds you.
Love is A heroic loser seeded within the pounding pastures of our crimson core.
(at least you got me inspired)
I've been saying this shit for years.
Every now and then i read something on this site and it restores my faith in the human condition, you sir are ahead of your time with this poem, stanza 2 is right their kicking like a mule. *9*
Not bad at all-original too, in a way.
Interesting...
Have you read 'Koko' by Peter Straub?
I have a really nasty feeling that this poem could well apply to me in thirty years' time. It's incredibly beautiful, but not what I need at this time.
This ecco's my sentiments - we should not be surprised when we are attacked by those we flourish off of. This is written quite well - S4L4 - how bought "that arizes when people live with disease; and polluted airs cause some to gasp and to weeze.
Yet another atrocious posting - however this time you get a 1, as it is marginally better than your usual litter.
Fate is cruel ! Nelson now has thousands of Pidgeons shitting on his arms (oops I mean arm)
I liked this -7-
Buy A Remington