-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on some deleted poem
25 Nov 2002, 1:10 PM
This poem gave me a good chuckle - thanks!
wench-a-riffic. i wish i had a tarantula.
cheater.
almost a rye for the catcher. poindexter.8.
Well, I find that the point of love is to find someone with whom you truly feel comfortable - after all, what else is life about!
Please don???t expose your ignorance on this site - some of us are trying to write serious poetry!
"Frank settled down out in the valley, and he hung his wild years on the nail that he drove through his wife's forehead."
great haiku. your title is borderline redundant not to mention also apparently thrown to the wind. such a waste...should be something like "how to blind a bully" or "turnaround and close your eyes". take a 6. poor old man.
i would lose the () at the end kiddy fiddler...otherwise this is sheer genius.
On a more serious note, whilst I find the idea of 'jellied skin' excellent, I'm pretty sure that most people would not view it in a similar light.
No one is to stone anyone, until I blow this whistle!!
Even, and I want to make this absolutely clear,
EVEN IF THEY DO SAY JEHOVAH!
oh crud.
impressive. yield.
Ok, I'm done pissing everyone off. Besides I think I lost.
Oh yea. Nice work Craigus, and nice defence in the face of critism. 10\10
ahahahaha this website is really full of fuckwits with nothing better to do but sit and write about crap just cos they think it will raise a smile freddy i suggest you find a hole to crawl in
you're wrong...right now as we speak there are a bunch of kindred dick-weigh-ors reading the cobain journals saying geez...he liked jellied skin..so than shall -eye-
it really is an over analyzed reference to amoeba and ancient oceans critters that we evolved from before the angels came and fucked neaNDERTHALLS! SO? take your jelly and spread it thin....i'm still not impressed, in fact i'm still half asleep. dullards.
Oh the trials of being a kid. wait till real life shows up. Craig david blows bishops for bus fare and walks home.
i live in a tree stump. at least i will soon, if The Man catches up with me.
something happens with the last four lines that causes me to almost dislike this powerfull piece. could i do a re-edit for you? if so let me know. it's a shame to see a good movie throw it for no reason in the third act. here's a 6.
i've just seen all your cards.
I'm digging the jellied skin. and the tom waits.