smlink84
on Sod this! This poem can't rhyme for toffee... by Yardbird
22 Nov 2002, 7:48 PM
Funny.
smlink84
on I'm a homicidal kind of guy (spoof of every 'down-home' song you've ever heard) by Yardbird
22 Nov 2002, 7:52 PM
I like it.
a suicide love poem complete with the moon and menstruation and masturbation. i'm impressed.
yes. it was.
the double grace at the end doesn't work. anything ese would work...waist. face. taste..needs.call..9.
this is lovely, surely...no one wants to read it though because of the title..see how everyone is avoiding it? that's because they assume they know what its about because of the title. try something like jet streams or the santa annas...indian summer, indian breeze. who knows...all i know is no ones biting your hook. here's an eight for your wait.8.
I would rather watch a whole cow deep fry than read this again.
I would rather watch a whole cow deep fry than read this again.
Do you know what Free verse is?
And I will love to hate this poem forever, with all my heart. cliche
You should really write for Hallmark.
Interesting, "seems to me like only a part of a poem"
' calig ' ? choice pull aim set FIRE 6. because i hated the movie then and i despise it now.
GGGGGGGGGGGOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAA
this is exemplirary work to the tenth degree. 10.h
touching.7.m
are you shooting for a limited edition smurf anthology?
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
22 Nov 2002, 2:52 PM
one of the best I've ever read, shines with this strange and brilliant light at times, like the first part and the last lines. Are you German?
Anyway, the poem gets lost I think towards the middle, a little, but otherwise its a dime. Ten.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
22 Nov 2002, 12:16 PM
The title and poem work very well 2gether, and also the ending and certain lines are sublime
jackass. try hurling a midget next time. safer.-
Beautiful