razorgrin
on TWO STAR WARS FANS by UAFANTHORPEY
13 Nov 2002, 6:47 AM
I like it. Geeks fall in love too.
Bof. I don't particularly like this one. The second stanza especially.
delightful. reminds me a bit of "sexxodus", which is on this site. I really enjoy this. cupcakes all around.
you still got me reading your stuff, your use of language is beautiful.
still reading.......still intrigued, 10/10 for 20/20 vision
i'm trying to find a crap one you've wrote, congratulations i cant so i'm giving up.
Please read one of mine if you get time
The evidence suggests that you ARE Nicholas Jones and laughing at yourself. And if you didn't want to put Welsh, you could always have changed the line 'Squelch squelch'. 4 because I'm feeling strangely generous today.
I suspect you'd find them in the line breaks. This would explain why you never find love.
Well, personally, if I had known on the tenth of September last year what was going to happen the day after, there are a number of people I know I would have tried to convince go visit the World Trade Centre...
But why would you call your penis 'Yoda' anyway?
Unless it was small, green and wrinkly of course.Trying to tell us something are you?
very funny. i don't like monkeys, but i like this parody.
sparkly. how about an ode to a tenner?
This is crap.
from a welsh guy; my version
Princess Di Beautiful, fashionable
Died in ugly fashion
Lived with no passion,
Dodi, do or die - she didnt
love the opening 4 stanzas best, your work is nice to read and i will look out for more of your work. I have noticed by reading poems on this site that theirs a lot of zerohappy raters on some pretty good stuff, if you get anything below 5 their talking shit, give this a 9, nice one richa, good luck
Hi newbieme, first of all I thought your poem was very moving, its a bit freaky as i too wrote a poem called 'Goodbye Dad' and when i post it next week i want you to read it because the scene you set is similar to mine. I imagine that could be read at a funeral and dont forget mate, poetry is not always about critical consensus most people would be moved by your poem and that makes it a force, you know this aint W.H Audens 'Funeral' but its your Auden and i respect that, if it was any Dad they would be proud.
lose the last line, it dont deserve to be voted this shite by others i give 5 coz i reckon you were possessed by Ouzo
COOL
forgot to vote 7/10