to yieu, and yieu and yieu.

Your format makes this terrible poem a pain to read. All in all a disaster.

it's all the pot you're smoking. It makes you paranoid and hyper-aware. not bad, but not interesting either. Some parts are bad.

with your tremendous insight into hallucinogenic drug use, i'm sure if you write your congress man...legalization will be just around the corner. or not. 3. p.s are you dark angels puppet too, or just his manicurist?

I disagree with horus (what's new?). It flows well. This is my favorite of your pieces.

You bore the shit out of me and as an extra bonus, you can't spell.

yes i disagree w/horus also, and i am horus...hows that grab you! lol! on re-reading this..i was shocked to find that i judged this poorly due to my own nasty highschool inuendos...this is laddishly cute and redeemably prophetic for you younger gen z...out there..beware of the young lovers stare... 7.

Tether is real. All else is idealism. Plus it brings the visual of holding on and and helping them, even if it means fighting the prevailing winds. Also it is love that keeps me tethered. Otherwise I'd have drifted out into the stratosphere years ago, or worse yet, gotten stuck in a tree. So you're leaving truck-driving? I hope it works out well for you.

i can vouch for that, and he even climbed killamanjaro too...not too mention 'an' volcano in equador...god's wife is equadorian...sh..... 9.

I liked the poem. Especially, of course, the title and it's relation to the 2nd to last stanza. The comments are well-written, funny/scary and I wish I had just a smidgen of your talent for pulling things out of your ass. "Look mommy the entire L.A. philharmonic"! Hows baby^yaga feeling today. no more 104 temp?

perhaps a good 7 inch vibrating dildo of 'self esteem'...unless of course, you prefer a masked man through the bedroom window?...7.

WOO HOO!!! Another motorhead! I prefer mine with four wheels but since I've moved from the Mile High to WI, I can really dig that cool Harley vibe. Ride on!!!!

I think this poem captures the protaganists predicament quite well.

This has potential. Focus more on the breathing aspects and less on other junk. No score. work it.

Is this a product of your deceitful thoughts over the weekend? Or is this to a father. Anyway, I am not sure I like it so much. Usually I haiku is more of a straight up image and this feels more like a statement.

and why do you put apostrophes around your titles?

easy...noah..back away from the arc and put the the pair of vietnamese box turtles down 7.

but I like the title.

Seriously, what's up with the sleep dep. dude. Dudette?

Of the four , this falls pretty flat. The other three are decent and I think you have talent. This is a tough crowd. Show us.