Poingnant,scary,funny.8

it's a nice one

I like this my friend!and I don't agree with you!I appreciate your understanding!I didn't expect anybody like that" Paysage Moralise"(a moralized landscape).Itwas not complex but was personal and deep(in it's personal aspects)I learned the title from apoem by Auden with the same name (a beautiful piece indeed)once more thanks very much.a 10 for your poem and understanding!

Oh and I like the poem as well. I too trip up over 'menstruating' - I see your reason for putting it in and maybe the in-your-face effect is deliberate.

That is the question any writer must face - stay human or write like a god? Very well put.

Yep, very nice. 'softly immortal' is lovely.

Lovely and compact and says it all. Sometimes two lines is just enough.

Cack. Not a Haiku. But don't bother trying to make it into a Haiku. It will still be cack. Probably even cacker. Unless you just scrap this and start again. Great poeme! P.S I think you mean 'morn' not 'mourn'

I agree with Christof you need to get out more, strike a balance between talking to objects and talking to objectionable people

curiously trite, but right.`

the israelites walked a century, for milk and honey...instead they find giants..

boy that's nice. girl that's thrice. dog that's lasvegas, with a set of loaded dice.l

my trick knee???

nentwhiny.t

Sorry I assumed latin. What a dumb-fuck eh?

this poem is gr8,it has that magic

he he- nice one

I enjoyed it and thought it made sense until ..exploring into the late hours...8/10

A stroke of genius or the emperor's new clothes ? I'll give you the benefit Hans- 7/10

This was good, though of course technically Fulham don't live here any more-Loftus Road is their new abode