school sucks, huh.

dead on

a near miss, christof

Awwwwwwwwwwwww!

"Life: so our own yet so not" That is sooo true. I love that line!

Amalea... nicely done... i enjoy reading your work...

Yeah! really nice. right on. can't wait for the rest (are you undressed?)

Anyone found a holy church within reach...please go and do not be bashfull. You could even join the choir and your son could be an altar-boy (toy). Good - munchy - stuff - that - makes me want more and MORE AND MORE (kinda like cocaine)

Smile - ever beautiful, in the heat of summer...zzinia is still alive..(wink) Your still on my shelf, bright; lighting; comforting these eyes.

Okay, I see we have a problem here and being the nice person I am, I want to resolve it with my two pennies. Okay, God's Wife is not saying the poem sucks, but I will be more than happy to say it sucks, because, well, it does. It is tied down with over bearing triteness thats sound like it is coming from someone who had his heart broken and the started reading David Eddings. I mean come on: there is Darkness Visible and there is Darkness Just Plain Goofy. And unlike Dark Angel, I am not being ironic. But you do have the following of a 14 year old blonde girl and royalflesh, who we thought was horus8 but no way in any character could he give this an 8, so that settles that. so that should get the muse working. Sadness or depression can be dealt with in so many wonderful ways, unfortunately, you have taken the route of every other teenager (I know you are not one, but you sound like one) and therefore are deserving of the harsh criticism. That is just the nature of the beast. that 0 there, well, it is mine. And that is my piece.

in all honesty jeremi and horus8 are two completely seperate things....horus 8 is an character that i developed for an album and a grouping of writings, and images around which tell a 'fictitious' an story similiar to the who's tommy but on the internet operatic new age tecno-jazz improv level slam poetry for the smallville diss-illusioned...jeremi is an seperate issue altogether not a writer more of a homebody who looks nothing like or behaves anything like horus8 he reads, takes care of his son and spends time acting and performing on several various levels...horus8 is only jeremi's evil twin alter e-goed similiar to thad beaumont in the dark half and bachus was an even deeper off shoot of that, but they are 'characters' frozen in time and behavior..patterned..created...not moving forward in reality only through the context of the internet...otherwise..they go unmentioned and forgotten throughout jeremi's day....ask god's wife she knows everything...you cheeky bastard. i would shoot myself if i had to look like that..trust me.. that's the great thing about levels..one can never realy tell what's fiction and what's reality...for instance we all know you're realy miss Kentucky, but we're cool with that cuz you make up for your splendid face with priceless gems as the bullshit express. dick. p.s i'm realy just jaded and bitter it's all true bullshit..god i fucking love this web site poemrancor poemrancor POEMRANCOr! hooray.e

Belittling and sweet at the same time. What usually makes me decrease marks is the wrong/non usage of apostrophe. E.g. you're not your and we're not were.

Hey are you really half African? tell me, tell me! Where did all your points go?

I love this kind of untouched snapshot, although the last line doesn't quite finish the set up of the 1st 2.

Also, I know you don't necessarily like "density", but I think the last third could stand to be more concise.

Ah the verbal gymnastics you put my neurons through. Personal trainer. Arsenal drainer. Rubber neck craner. Vegetable strainer. Confort zone maimer. Pinchi Cavrone.

I'm curious, what books of poetry do 15 yr olds read these days? Seriously.

why get me in this... Why not write about crushing your sister's legs (as you are definitely an overweight, overly-sensitive, wrenched individual) when she pulled out the stap-on and rode your slimy pathetic ass. It "was" a compliment. Now I dispise your presence eternally. No Vote.

Blegh.

you'd do better to stay away from ballbuster video