dude, it's not working for ya.

Lovely. "Green-swathed" & "attic keep" seem slightly pretentious in this setting. Stanza 1 has a simpler voice.

Well I never. Look everyone...something worthy.9.

STOP IT! STOP THIS INSTANT!

satan. now it all comes clear. go get a cat.

Who would have thought a poeme containing the word 'beshitten' could be so beautiful? NOT ME THAT'S FOR SURE!!!!!11 But seriously Christof, you couldn't make the first eight if your buttocks depended on it! Which, judging by their flabbiness, they obviously do. 10/10!

I like this. 8. The drug references are risque (have you ever noticed that people shy away from commenting on poems alluding to drugs?) but nicely done, and the final section ends the poem succinctly. The short lines add atmosphere to the piece. I'm impressed.

ah, amalea. someone thought you were -=Dark_Angel=-. it was ot me. here, have a medium.

what did you change? would need necessarily equate to tender-hearted kisses? wouldn't it have more to do with flame? why fall back like that? help me mrs.g. i flounder.

Boring. 5. This attempts to emulate Dylan but fails. The ending is weak and the whole affair simply leaves me cold.

Clever. 8. The second stanza is the weakest, but the final two are excellent. However young man, you're currently breaking the law by having underage sex, and have been reported to the relevant authorities already. Look forward to a lifetime of desperately shielding your arse from fellow inmates.

This is both sweet and lovely, but also inaccurate. Is a frozen butterfly (note the 'r' in the correct spelling) really a tear in heaven? I very much doubt it, but for your beautiful imagery you score 8 regardless. However, the haiku is rather whimsical and vague. What exactly are you trying to convey? I have no idea, and I suspect that you don't either.

As luck would have it, this one came up last. I read all your pieces. The erotic ones are "obvious" and I would rate those lowest. Some of the others are "one syllable short of a haiku" (like your haiku which quite literally, well, you know...). But here and there are ideas which are quite inspirational. You are obviously a fan of words (but tend to use some inaccurately). I think the best advice I can offer is to edit two or three of these "proto" poems into one cohesive whole. This work shows promise, I'm sure it'll improve if you keep at it. Like I said this was the best.7.

It's good like always christof!"under skin of veins/and skeins of nerves/cleaving close/to bone like desperation".quite professional.liked it more than others.10

Hard to read, guess that makes it well written? Hard to give a particularly good score to something so unpleasant.7. Hey, enough of the poetry advice, you need some travel guidance...next time go to Taxco, it's pretty. Come to think of it Mexico City seems better than the place you describe :). Hell, make that 8, it makes me feel good about living in the UK.

sorry h. it's tew good to be bad. but here's a cupla zero for you, nonetheless.

and again

LOvely

hallowed. not hollowed. unless you're carving a pumkin, dammit.

Left me wanting more info. The 3rd stanza is ellusive.