I stand corrected madam!

Poo.

You get nothing for something some-times, but something for nothing is a speculation wherein the getter gets something that nothing on earth can cause you to hold past the point where your LUCK changes.

you must be a telewacker of the after dark club.

Normally I quite like bathos but the last line here is just a step too far. But this is pretty darn good

Belive me I'm not trying to bring the blackness to your life Doylum. But I can't help it if the overarching darkness of life is so bleakly apparent today. Perhaps it is the end.

No never for i now have wings

nice one vulcan.;-)

These comments are stupid. This poem for someone at 13 is a very good achievment. The point in poetry is to subjective, that is express youself just yourslef as much as and as good as you can. That is what this poem does. It's a good self-image of a teen. To give [0] is sheer stupidity.

The two computer thing, sure that was a joke, although I never know, especially if you are on of those tech sorts. But as far as you and the beaker being the same, well, no joke there.

hehe, cute one =)

Clarity is important for a good poem and you have it. The first line has a contradiction nowhere/by your side. Better to say: Take me back to nowhere as long as you..etc. Then the poem shoud end at line 6. Delete the rest. It is all boring repitition.

Clarity is important for a good poem, and you have it. The first line has a contradiction: nowhere/by your side. Better to say: as long as by your side. The poem nicely finishes at line 6. The rest is boring repetition. Delete it.

Another Lite Brite poem from the youngster class. Everything about this poem is boring, but considering the age of the Arteest, I suppose I should find it shear genius. But trite is trite. Sorry.

This poem really says nothing. If there are any specifics, they are lost in the style. Why not "you may" all the way. I was sad to see it stop.

Excellent poem. Check this one out Beaker. A young and sober Bukowski. Influences showing right through, eh? What a first image.

This is crap. blood curling anial crap. If there is such a thing, which there isn't but its still crrrrap!

It's no Rocky Horror Picture Show but it will do....... I suppose. ;)

Why must the hamburgular tickle my prostate? 'whould have been a better way to finish. are you finished? that is all.

You naked scalp breathed cinnamon ?? Now I like this poem, but for the life of me I cannot see how that line is first rate. A bald head inhaling spice? I don't get it.