some deleted user
on spirit of a grama by livingcanvas
30 Aug 2002, 11:38 PM
Absolutely beautiful. I look forward to seeing more from you.
"Now only a few crumbs..."comes beautfully like a downfall.7
uh... hmm... right.
Some spell binding imagery, I shall follow your work Rach.
beautiful and earnest.7
the words themselves ache with the loss.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
31 Aug 2002, 5:52 AM
I'm sure they can... but maybe my walls are too high to hear them or their sweet voices too weak...
This is dreadful, i've wasted a whole 60 seconds of my life reading this tripe, it stinks, you certainly are not a poet.
Some spell binding imagery, I shall follow your work Rach.
Some spell binding imagery, I shall follow your work Rach.
you sick, sick man. Whats your fascination with the virus?
I will most certainly follow your work after perusing this fragile little gem. Love the way you have controlled your emotions from verse to verse, each creating there own individual statements that are as bold as brass.
it means "look down" see that. that's you're reflection in my 'hoof' wondering why you care....open your dictionaries and look it up, but rather you already know what it means don't you?!. here try this one...than translate it into a romantic language of your choosing.............field of citrus.frost.shrink.rot.harvestless? how about that taRT?o
Thank you Zin, I appeciate your genuine words. I have experienced a lot of death and destruction in my life as part of the destiny of my people. I had nothing to succour me but the idea of love and attempting to express it in poetry. We need owr own game/illusion to balance the essential absurdity of our mortal existence.
I like it, can't put my finger on why. Is there a haiku in there struggling to get out? No, it probably couldn't be edited that far. Still, paints a vivid picture..8..(and a half if we had them)
truly passionate.hope you success in later poems.7
you are a poet indeed or become a real one soon.8
A disturbing subject, deftly handled. 8.
I agree with Mojo, an air of ambiguity leaves asking why do I find this seemingly morbid piece so enrapturing
Beauty of the poem lies in the first stanza.the second one is not that original.yet it was beautiful.6