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h-verklempt is good. re: TP--i'm a little jealous. have fun. frass: yes... mrs. god--i would be honored. just keep your neck away from the guillitine while reciting it...

Did you even read Act I? You can't just jump into the middle of the flight of a samurai, any good ninja can tell you that.

i don't remember if i even stopped to breath while i read this...it flows like broken water, so this should be your child.

Excuse me? 'Format'? If by 'the Dark angel format' you mean 'putting forward points and defending those points in order to establish a conclusion', then yeah, I did expect that you'd argue in that 'format', although it's not so much a 'format' as a 'description of what "argument" means'. Sorry if that definition is too tight for you to spread your righteous wings! Next on the list of wonders... No, I haven't contradicted myself. My suppositions about you weren't important to my point (or should I say "defense"?) Your accusations of me ARE your point. As for your laughable declaration of emancipation, I think you need to realise that nobody's trying to constrain you. No, not even me. Finally, don't overestimate your unconventionality. You're about as enigmatic as a mug. It's not so much that you don't make sense to me as that you're barking up the wrong tree entirely. Bye now!

-=Dark_Angel=- --so, is this 'poemranker', or 'ranker rancor'? no criticism on the poem? do your worst, sirrah. there are few spots i'm thinking of modifying it, and would like your opinion of the weak points. many thanks.

Who the fuck knows what this site is... since you ask for my opinion, whether in jest or not, I'll give it to you. However, don't expect it to be insightful (and above all, try not to be constrained, since I have a nasty habit of dictating to people and trying to force them into playing by my petty rules). The writing is pleasing, and what imagery I can 'get' is interesting, but I don't understand what is supposed to be going on 'really'. I also thought the second half of the fourth stanza (paragraph, whatever it's called) is hard on the eyes. It reminds me of Erik the fucking Viking, or something. If there was a greased old man in the sea it would be better in my estimation.

we'd be more fucked if there was a woman with you trust me...the future is indeed bleek if this ones a-sexual.. people...somebody fetch my blow-gun, before he runs away alas'....the laser sighted! not the hindu-succubus powered prat dispatcher! ye wretched imp (i will cane him later) 'fore i ream your arse with my long nail..1/10!

this is it!!!!!!!THIS IS IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1this is it1!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!i have found it ha! the worst poem in the existance of rock banging communication since the dawn of man and tongue clacking jubilation yes i win a prize and so does he lol!!!!!! i win a frontal lobatomy for even reading this(should have known by his subtle user name) and he wins the HORUS8 PRIZE OF DISTINCTION IN ALL THINGS UNDISTINCTIVE AND HORTICULTURALLY HOMOGENIZED YOU SIR.. win none other then the "NIPPle-leSS PLATINUM BOOB OF TIAMATS YOUNGER SISTERS GARDENERS ILLEGAL IMMIGRANT LOVER". be proud than ice pick your parents and yourself ..as soon as your scars heal of course(i'm not a complete chaotic evil trogyldite...i sir.am charismatically uncommited.

damnit woman bite your tongue! Bachus has hired me to represent him in all further communication with him...because your under age.dangerous.sexy.stubborn and invisible...therefore.OH AND HOW dare you imply bachus has read any such blah earth blee series tripe...that would be ..ah..how should we say...incriminating in his traveled circles (to say the least embarissing)..refrain yourself! he said just now from a dark area behind me that he never read that series(while incarcerated for three months in minn.)<they had a great library>he merely scanned it, thankyou.now i must be going to see tom petty now toodlelou

I seriously doubt he merely scanned it for the details he mentioned: "...does this mean i can mount you like a flat head...steal your otterskin medicine bag and slingshot, and then mount you again " plus the comment about totems. and what is this about him not speaking to me? he was being rude in his comment and it sparked an awkward three-day long conversation. that's all...if he doesn't wish to "speak" with me anymore, fine. he can just stop writing. but he really should read the books if he hasn't already. blah blah I don't care to speak to you anymore. Sincerely ~Jade

hey! easy...i was at the tom petty concert...relax...i've read the entire series including shelters of stone...horus was just being critical and self removed, he's uppercrust 'private' school high strung....pay ye no heed...so...ah..yeah the talent of mrs. auel is interestingly refferencial to say the least...and i spent many a afternoon doing more then scanning, but her books only saturate one of my many facets, ahhh.. currently i prefer more bacon, crowley, and thoreau...with a little graham greene, poetry lately has been like...ahhh....dylan thomas, poe short stories and plath with a tinge of rumi and bhaddahari "the hermit and the love thief"...sorry about the confusion my rouged petal...no need to get assumptive...i always pay attention...here i'll go browse you're titles to satisfy curiousities....black eyed peas.watershipdown.dragoneyes.the bad place..

uhhh yeah....is this poetry or compressed wishful thinking...lucky guy, sounds ahh.like you need to pay attention to the hidden meaning behind mothers ass cracked sand fables.. <broght to you buy the 'trojan horse' a wooden gift horse, not a rubber, and 'festooned' the only way to get tattoos>

check lines 4,7, to fix typos "heal", should be "heel" and "saftetly" should be well you know...just looking out for you bros..editor's advice is golden...

Clive Barker just bungie jumped out of the ghost structure of the shattered light house in Alexandria with a piano string tied to his mushroom prince...the judge from kenya gave his dive a 6.667895 for missing the water... i cryed for the loss of a great visionest...

thank you. i did ask sincerely, and i tend to be unconstrained, mostly. i must sit with it more; there is something missing for me. i think you are right about 'what is going on'; i had an idea full formed when i wrote it, but i'm sure i didn't convey all the points i meant to. and now, back to our regularly scheduled programming....

dense. dense. dense. wanna borrow my hammer drill? maybe then you could get through.

duck season? 7/10!

Ok. I'll futilly restate that I'm pretty sure it's the other way 'round, but it's strictly for the record.

oh, and Bachus- did you know the 5th book in the Earth Children's Series finally came out this year? it did. its the best so far i think. it is like the first and second, i think the third was basicly a sex-filled romance and the fourth was quite sparse and jumpy. :) its called the shelters of stone. read it.