That is some serious rhyming.

Funny or not funny. This sucks and is a waste of time. I cannot believe you actually bothered to rewrite the fucking thing and repost it.

that was pretty good

I liked that

that was very beatiful

wasn't me. Definitely not zero material. not a bad poem, actually.

Is this a response to the paltry nationalism that is rearing its head on this site? This is just hogwash patriotic crap. Sounds like some shit Blair would send Bush.

Oh God another poem about how the muse struck while sitting one day on the toilet.

Maybe best not to answer those calls. I know, easier said than done. Nice work. 8/10

Nothing important or interesting distinguishes you from anyone else of your age, race, sex and nationality. Go away and do not return.

Oh, to make a life within our dreams. Like your stuff! 7/10

Don't even sweat that shit p&k, i woke up this morning with zeros everywhere too, not to mention death threat e-mails, and a coward's invented horus8 sex family video sent to me(also e-mail) saying all kinds of lovely venomous tripe with an attachment so fucking moving i had to laugh, and forgive the sick gesture. most assuredly all from the mind of a fat pimply faced seventeen year old with a radish plugged ass and a columbine relationship with their existence..then again it could of always been a 40 year old carpet munching cock hater who wishes she could have kids, but unfortunately daddy left booted her cunt so many times her filopian tubes are tangled, and she's just jealous that some people can do more than just one thing at a time...then again there's always mr., and mrs., bogs..ha! lol! i forgive the attack, some of these people have no sense of humour, not to mention weak offensives....point being..unless your imagination can out imagine mine don't even come to the frontline..it's futile...now it's my turn, and here i come..prepare!......oh babbit very descriptively sound and placid to the point of wood molecule vibrations, i feel you.. 8/11

8/10 for a pleasant image wrapped up tight

you know, stubar, deleting a person's comment won't help you with this one. again, i say: this teaches me nothing. to fall in love with a person who is tied to another is a soul-rending experience. you piss all over the reader's digest condensed version of it. write about what you know, not what you think you know. your mirror is shallow indeed.

It is not even an issue of bad or good. We have poets on this site that need honest criticism to propel their work to levels acceptable for publication. Consider this a massive writing group. Weed out the shit and keep the good and the help each other out. The people here that are fighting for something. You know, to make a living at this shit or at least move up to another level of writing. So, if you can give something a 0, say something. I am sure we would all like to hear it. That is what it is all about.

That was uh Diffrent

Quite the good poem. The repetition works well, but I think the second stanza is calling out for a bit of work.

Nice alliteration. Did you have to discard 'creamy custard' or 'manly molasses' before arriving at 'condensed milk confetti'?

This is quite the weak poem filled with cliched language, images and ideas. With lines like "you make the world seem so glad" just kill the poem. I'd like to buy the world some coke.....la de da.

Oh for fucks sake, who gave this a 0. Is it shear fucking jealously? And then not to leave a comment. Tell me you who left the fucking 0. Where are your scrawny little poems. Tell me what you have against this? Is it you razor girl? Who? Let us start a debate. Not that babs gives a fuck. Anyway, forest man - is this new?