Anagram, Thanks for the kind words. I've modified "Just Another Day." What do you think? Doug

Now that's good clean fun! 7/10

babbit11: I tried to make the appropriate changes based on your apt suggestions. Thanks. What do you think about the changes I made? Doug

"Snotty film"?

...Jesu, that's who. Keep trying YW.

Dear Razorgrin: Thanks for the compliment. Why copyright? Well, I don't know for sure-----It just seemed like the most prudent thing to do----? Doug

I'd like to suggest the following changes to your poeme: There was a young fellow named Dave / Who dug up a prostitutes grave / She was was moldy as shit / And had only one tit / But think of the money he'd save. As you can see, the new version scans better and the last line actually rhymes correctly. Good day.

It's a much more sticky puddle now Doug. I am proud on this Monday to share in the modesty of the more shady 'real' side of your Christianity. Now what should we do about the muslims? I know, I have a submission in mind. It reads like a japanese migrane bullet train now doug. 9/10. Cuz I love psycho analyzing christian humanist (Bachus was reared in parochial schools)l

I'd prefer -=No Angel=-. Submit something worth a damn and stop indulging your self-imagined refulgence. Have you tried Galoise cigarettes? They're delicious; have 5 packs, today.

'with only one tit', but think of the money he'd save' /would make tighter, but i'm sure d.a already said this to a certain extent. on a brighter note a dentist in alberta, canada fashioned a polyurethane beak and attached to a 4 year old eagle that had it's original 'beak' shot off by earthforsaker. lets hear it for false 'beaks' and all other flesh tearing appendages and flagellas.

Neal, yes, Neal Cassady! East High School Graduate. Swept floors at May D&F. Drank at My Brother's Bar, hung with the homeless in Civic Center Park. Yes, Neal. Where the fuck did I get Nick so early in the morn.

Hot damn, Dave, socio-political commentary crackling like a Taser. Edit a little more before posting. 'Wild dancing shadows' is strong; 'carefully packaged...' is confusing. The last lines are memorable.

Dear Bachus: Thanks for liking my poem "Just Another Day." I made a few changes. What do you think? Again thanks for your support. Doug Doug

Interesting point------- but for fuck's sake, don't you think it's been made before?

Dear youngweirdo: Very crude------but I liked it! Quick and to the point. Good satire. I gave it an 8! Doug

This is just goofy.

P.S I also suggest you change the title from 'prostitute' to 'WHORE SKELLINGTON'.

And add an apostrophe to 'prostitutes'.

Who says I can't do constructive criticism?

I'm sure this brings back not so pleasant childhood memories for a lot of people. Evocative and honest.8.