This has incensed me. 2. A quite frankly dire effort. Your rhyming is poor and there is nothing in the content of the poem that interests me in the slightest. You should be ashamed.

Firstly, thanks for choosing a user name like Pete, given what some of us have come up with. 'Sea spray abandon' is a memorable phrase.

Like it a lot.

I realize this is first grading, and the sentiment is quite "nice", but so are the trite thought of the emoting teenagers on the site and this poem is about at that level.

at first i was like "this again" then you said sovereignty, and i was like oh my GOD! "this again".... and paradox equipped nonethe wiser.

You are henceforth banned from using any of the following words in an Haiku: Spring, Summer, Autumn, Winter. If you do not comply with my wishes, I will be contacting your parents forthwith! Good day to you, Sir!

The day in a life is a much better piece. This could easily go in a gift card for someone's 50th birthday. Have you considered contacting Hallmark?

This starts out weak and just slowly keeps falling apart.

I read this a few days ago and I wanted to comment on it but for some reason I always forgot to log in. :o) Anyways, enough of me being a spaz. It's a beautiful piece. It's very gentle, and yet I can feel the yearning in it. You rawk my sawks, in plain Enlish. ;o) You get an 8 from me. :o)

Best one I've seen in this form since joining the site.

Yeah, you know what they say - dying is the best career move you can make.

Can't concur, considered clever.Clearly capable creator.Continue contributing.

i always loved freddie too. miss his voice.

Thanks, mojo. Celebrating a two month old boy's existence in an autumn sunset.

Sorry had to post this deeply sentimental and personal work. Thanks for going easy with first grading and comment.

So sorry to have to have inspired such ire Tarq. (hope you don't mind me calling you Tarq.).That is twice you have had a go at my rhyming ability without explaining the reason for your low opinion.Please expand,I would be grateful. I have read 1 or 2 of yours which were open verse, do you just dislike true poetry that rhymes or can you not catch on to the cadence.

i need to pretend that i'm choking you to death..change dreams to screams and again to orgy, then change the last line too i'm not well read...so it becomes Friday night orgy/ Sipping from my glass of screams/ have you seen my date?/ sorry last minute change, and odoyle if your out there <icurse you with a spearmint hair ball> choke bastard!

This is utter shit. 3. You get marks for attempting a Haiku, but none whatsoever for the actual effort. Poor. If I was 10 years old I wouldn't be proud of this.

Sir, you are deranged. 0. This is scary stuff, and I do believe that the authorities that miss your presence in their institutions need to be notified.

She's too good for you, you pathetic little man.