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on silence of the sky by david
13 Aug 2002, 10:15 PM
thank you, that gives me more. and more.
that's why they call it spring cleaning..p
the choices are limitless and mind-boggling indeedy..6/10 r
i'd like to see more of your poetry, T de la B. you have been quite vocal, of late. put your words, um, where your other words are. yeah, that's exactly it. post some, so that we, in turn, may have our turn at summing you.
the last line, why did you do that? it was going some where, and with the last line, it fell flat. IMHO.
i think that the repeat works nicely; the crashing rhythm echoing that of it's namesake. the use of the sea as a thief, a receptor of losses--has been done so many times, and i think you used it neatly here, by twisting the metaphor so that taker becomes the one who has lost.
'We' are fans of David Hume, I think.
it took me a while to get inside this one. i'm glad i came back to it. i am feeling the swell of it, and keening with you.
Curious that you should mention David Hume; I recently (re-)read his essay 'Of the Standard of Good Taste'. He was a smart cookie, but as for the nonsense of him being the greatest philosopher to have written in the English language, it's a big stretch IMO.
the beautiful nomad has marked your humble abode i see..he is well..i'm glad you are too..goodnight. read stranger from a strange land. robert heinlen(probably mispelled last name) you'll love it. i know this feeling from both sides.... topple.henry.kissinger.doily. 7/10???
visual as always..spwaking of bowel sounds..yes children is time for horus8's poetry countdown till i fall down..hey z.. unfortunately he has been doing these pyramid things since preschool block stacking me thinks..remember nap time in pre-school all of the cot escaping urine..also very visual..i like pee..one time this guy paid me 500.00$ to.....7/10o
evening z..i wish i could talk more, but people think i'm weird when i'm jacking around with my palm pilot at social functions..it's kinda like reading at a bus stop in east la. hazardous.this place is fucking LAME i'm outta here in twenty minutes unless that brunette is sophia coppolae
wanted: any woman any where as soon as possible cuz my balls are the size of florida grape fruits=the voice over of this poor yearning love ballad..it's perfectly metered..i think, so you got that going for you. 5/10
yes...i agree..but they never have anything better to do. get em!e
alack, allay! i no longer possess the only 'triangle poem' (as p&k so brilliantly dubbed it) on the site. methinks i should end it all, now, before everyone tries me with their angles! apart from that, i must say that your keen observation of the mundane and subsequent crafting of the experience into language almost always delights me. wry to the core. encore.
evening h. take what you can from the lamity. there must be something there worth looking at...sophia notwithstanding. i have been told that is most disturbing, the way i tend to vanish from social events without a word of warning. i just can't abide the 'scene'. got better things to do. like jack off into my palm...oh, my, that sounded vaguely offensive. heh. i'm being a dick now. better go focus on something other than how tired i am. must...write...before...slepp. ta.
sing-songy and lovely.
i want to know who 'we' are.