kawakurdi
on some deleted poem
12 Aug 2002, 2:47 PM
Is there anyway to prevent poets from scoring their own poems?
its time to move on!!!!!
This is fantastic! I giggle!
November does suck ass, but I'm rather fond of December.Not a bad poem though.
some times you can want to much
and find yourself with nothing?
kind of nice if meant as a mature ironic comment on man's thinking with his dick and presenting as soul .. otherwise if you're about 14-15 not a bad effort at all .. i take it you checked dark angel's 3 am poem ... spot the difference ... and similarities !
you are indeed alone but i wonder why acid-awareness doesn't make this joyful
LOL (really) 1 point for that and one more for rhythm
Agemo--nice? Did you even read D.A.'s first comment?
here are some excerpts if anyone needs to be reminded:
"What on EARTH is wrong with you, you fucking idiot? Do you think this is original in any way? Do you think anyone gives a flying fuck?"
"It says NOTHING except that you're a fucking moron. You're probably the most ugly son of a fuck the world has ever seen."
"But how could anyone love such a pathetic cretin? I couldn't. Nobody could. No-one. You'll end up married to some mousy loser just like you only to avoid being lonely when you retire. Of course, you could equally well be female, in which case just fucking get used to the fact that men want your punani, not your stupid opinions..."
"You worthless pool of semen. You butt-kissing little whore. Never attempt to share your feelings again if they're this awful."
Who should we be nice to again? Dark Angel was obviously just being a dickhead! How simple is it to say a poem is bad? It's fucking simple. He/She didn't need to add in all of that other irrelevant, insulting bullshit.
but really you are just a young hippie? especially considering your poems (of course I have only read five - that's all you get now) are filled with moronic babble that makes the young pups on the site ohhh and ahhh and run out to the eastern philosophy section at the local book store. and how dare you call my work juvenile - i am a champion writer with words that at least have something definite to say, not flow in circles as i try to mesmerize and woo young girls with my charming understanding of new age movements. call rubbish, rubbish. you should send her to read my work, so she can see what real poetry is.
babbitt--again, subtly evoked vast emptiness. p&k--are you really as one dimensional as you purport?
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
12 Aug 2002, 4:09 PM
many questions!!!!!!
WHY IS THE TITLE ALL IN CAPS IS THERE SOME SORT OF SIGNIGICANCE THERE? And then of course there is the ARE and BEING. Is it because this is some lyrical tribute to GOD as WOMAN? OR AM I JUST MISSING THE POINT completely? And how can a cloud have a shadow when you already established a couple of lines prior that the moon is nowhere around. It is darkness. Is this some mystical cloud from the woman GOD that can make shadows in the dark? Or is the shadow cast from all the fire and flames going on here? Which would really hurt, even in metaphor. I quit reading before the ending so I don't know how it ends but i think this can go in the pile that my new friend pete calls rubbish.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
12 Aug 2002, 4:12 PM
AND i misspelled significance - so attack little puppies.
Ah zzinnia66, writer of triangle poems, my guide to the site, teaching me that a limerick is really a band with an extra "a", and that art of the absurdist (the literary style) poem, we finally meet again in the random file. I like this shape much better, but a few suggestions/questions. Is the article necessary in the first line? Have you tried the poem without the articles in the listing after the colon? Why the 'cross? I like stretched without the longer, but that is just my one dimensional self. Nitpicking I know, but with tightening this could be much better than geometry on a page.
horus8 prize for SETTING A MOOD TO BE MODELED after AWARD, a very rare prize indeed... mantel it well! because other wise the elitists from the "National Library of Poetry" might take it away and invite you to read poetry in D.C to a bunch of nerdtits who eweeee and aweee.god forbid you're to good. stay that way for mother and the silence we all yearn for 'between our ears''
i dunno where p&k it gets off rubbishing your work ; just read the juvenile garbage he ( i assume ) writes . BUT imho it's not very good. Zinnai66 said it all ... keep on keeping on
If you're attempting to question the writing skills of the folk here while being totally unmindful of the style you claim to be using, is it ironic or just dumb?
ubiquitous in tendency,. mmmmm nice
But it's ever so much fun to insult things! Besides, if you look at Agemo-Z's user info, it is part of his dual purpose to do so. Dare not stand in the way of his unholy mission!
first 4 lines are brilliant almost rocking but then wimps out into muzak