A bit common - but it might be a good drinking song.

They're not 'Roids, dude. I think I got them falling nakedly out of bed upside down and backwards. Owch! I THINK.

slaves do certainly think and zero came along way after big numbers ... some good images .."cold oven" i like

The Samurai: Totally sweet, AND he protects himself against STD's. A true hero.

I don't know why, but this made me think of SPAM.

Oh, and Dark Angel, Maids don't wear pants, they wear those skirt things with stockings.

Were you listening to Jimmie Hendrix before you wrote this? I suggest you light you keyboard on fire.

I don't mean slaves in the historical sense but those who choose to be slaves for sheer minimum material gain and zero in the philosophical sense as making big containing always the element of eliminating/zeroing the result. Think of worldcom's added zeroes, for example.

I'm not sure. I'll have to watch more TNN. By the way, 'tang is supposed to be short for 'Poontang' (provided that word has no other connotation than 'booty'... I don't really know), not a reference to your beloved childhood orange drink. Though he probably craves tang too.

hamgurl, don't you realise that ironically saying 'have a nice day' at the end of an intended-to-be-hurtful comment isn't exactly a telling blow? It's been done to death, baby. As for not being a 'hater', you need to think about the difference between being a hater and simply avoiding wild overenthusiasm. This poem is crap. Nearly everyone with any experience in reading or writing poetry will tell you it is crap. But I don't hate it.

as a child of the sixties you should know better than to give headspace to what "they" say about "god" . laughed at the punchline but reckoned it would have worked better as a haiku ( too long an inconsequential build-up (imho)

A 10 for semicolons. Is that Priest guy a fully fledged member of the A-Team, or was he just in that one "lost in redneck woods" episode? I missed the latino guy with the slick mullet in that one.

Damn, your wang is dusty? This really IS serious. :S Well, take heart... at least you can tell her to scrub some stubborn floor-stain and jerk while she bends over. Yahoo!

To find the answer to that, you'll have to read my much awaited sequel. :D P.S.- I should have mentioned, while reading this piece and any of its sequels, you should be listening to either the theme from "Soul Blade", the theme from "Evangelion" or "Thunderstruck". Thanks!

1. Your attempt to be aloof is ridiculous. 2. 'Dorkburger' is obviously not supposed to be a hurtful or clever insult. 3. Of course this poeme is a 'joke'. 4. Are you trying to prove some sort of point by writing in the most 'mature' way you can? Because I think you're just making yourself look like someone who thinks writing in a brisk and mature and efficient way is a good thing to do. As for not being 'worthy', I never wanted to be worthy of your poetic appreciation. My poemes are not meant for people who think that poemranker exists for people to be supportive and compliment each other's poemes no matter how crap they are. I'm not quite sure why you think withdrawing your willingness to criticise my poemes is some sort of blow.

Good insight - thanks for the critique. I'm always open to it. Can I blame it on me being new to this genre? Oh well, next week there will be more. Maybe better - maybe worse! Earthwalker

Just read all of your work and liked it all. This one is my favorite, as I play this game too. May I suggest you try Asia?

Skirt things with stockings? - good one dude , you are a poet

I think olives come second to feta cheese.

I don' need no haikus about yer hemruds.