Re: Memories by RION12	Rainbow_chaser 64.229.170.87	8-Mar-05/9:17 PM
take your memories, learn something from every even good or bad in your life... then it makes everything youve endured worth while, make a negitive memory or even a positive turning point and valuble lesson in life.. and you cant help but be grateful for memories. workes for me ;) ~Autumn
Re: Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter by DurtKL	MacFrantic 152.163.100.67	8-Mar-05/9:20 PM
RION12 Q.If these "bitches" don't know anything about you, nor do you care about them, nor do they have the irrelevant ability to do things that you can do, nor can they say shit to you, and you care more about their ability to perform oral sex on a man than the poem itself, then why comment? A. you're a douchebag, and this poem is very original and very good. *10*
Re: Memories by RION12	MacFrantic 152.163.100.67	8-Mar-05/9:25 PM
What memories? Peeing in the kiddie pool while everyone was watching? Or was it the episode of 7th heaven that changed your life? Grow up and learn to use grammar correctly. *4*
Re: genious by the_poetess	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.30.149	8-Mar-05/9:35 PM
Genius, I believe the word you want is Genius, and I wouldn't call myself one until I could at least spell it. Yea... people do worry about saving the world. I imagine them to be able write with better depth than this though. You have the potential, if you trimmed what you had and fleshed it out properly to have a nice piece here. But as it is, its crap. I do however like the underlying Arrogant tone to this though. -3- <3 Jason P.S. You won't make many friend is life by dropping zeros on people and not at least leaving a reason why you thought the piece in question sucked.
Re: Lesson in Wickedness by eyrbare	MacFrantic 152.163.100.67	8-Mar-05/9:53 PM
good. *9*
Re: A Nation by the_poetess	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.30.149	8-Mar-05/9:58 PM
lol, America coming undone? I like how you started this, but it was too long and detailed and I believe you lost your own point along the way. -7- Because there was some thought and attempts at being poetic here, but mainly because you did some of your homework. But mostly this comes off as the rantings of someone who thinks they understand whats going on in life, but in all actually doesn't.
Re: wishes by the_poetess	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.30.149	8-Mar-05/10:12 PM
I've read everything you've written up to date, and found two things. A) You need to use spell check. I tend to overlook a typo here or there(I mean come on they happen) but for the love of Buddha, save us the eyes strain. B) You can't be out of high school yet, are you? Your writting has the arrogant tone of someone who thinks they are a genius, but is still being taught. I'm guessing that you tend to read the materials during class, but fail to do the homework more often than not. This is by far the most poetic (and best)thing you've written to date. -8- <3 Jason
Re: don't know by the_poetess	leonxic 204.218.244.11	9-Mar-05/2:34 AM
Noone will ever understand your pain. LOL!!!!11
Re: Disfigure by DevilBuni	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.30.149	8-Mar-05/8:47 PM
Good sentiment, but it needs fleshed out. Nice name by the way. -7- <3 Jason
Re: Get Away by Miggy	Rainbow_chaser 64.229.170.87	8-Mar-05/8:51 PM
not bad, speeks loudly of how so many would rather complain about thier lives then really take the steps to figure it out and solve their problems, yet it always seems to help by being there to listen and offer support and simple obvious unjudgemental advice rather then ignore those in need.... ~Autumn
regarding some deleted poem...	Rainbow_chaser 64.229.170.87	8-Mar-05/8:56 PM
its simple, yet felt desperate, if its ment to be, it shall be, if not then the real thing will be felt tenfold by both people. Good luck ~Autumn
Re: Striking minds by celticskatermatt1	Rainbow_chaser 64.229.170.87	8-Mar-05/8:58 PM
? i feel like i missing something here....... or is it just me /:?
Re: Attention: Superman's Coffee Break is From 1:35 to 1:37 by MacFrantic	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.30.149	8-Mar-05/9:03 PM
lol, great writing. -10-
Re: Snow Sucks by JoyLuck	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.30.149	8-Mar-05/9:08 PM
I love how all is by itself. -7-
Re: wishes by the_poetess	Rainbow_chaser 64.229.170.87	8-Mar-05/9:10 PM
its truly sad how most live in the box our society has created, personaly im waiting for the news flash that all will change we will be shed of the elite control that seeks to conform us at every corner.. so sad, but hope holds strong for many, we will be free and our lives will once again be ours to live, freely without restraint, or repression, find a feild and run, do what ever empowers you, what ever rekindles that spark. and above all...Step away from the chocolates no hope of flyin with searching for happiness in a truffle box! ~Autumn
Re: Do You Need Me? by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	Rainbow_chaser 64.229.170.87	8-Mar-05/9:15 PM
Im not sure, i think i have an issue with the thought that you think someone would be "invisable without you.... like thats crap for sure, and be honest with yourself here we ALL have problems, and if you feel so used and mis-needed then why?? why?
Re: eat what you want. by burgerking33	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.232.11	9-Mar-05/5:02 AM
Nice, tight, little rant. Good diet, too. If you shove all that stuff up your... It never gets into your blood stream to clog your arteries.
Re: Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	edpeterson 68.79.52.31	9-Mar-05/7:22 AM
one pause to mimic.... I like it. the first stanza is unnecessarily difficult, especially while we try to decode "portently"
Re: eat what you want. by burgerking33	edpeterson 68.79.52.31	9-Mar-05/7:29 AM
NO! Don't eat that burger, Don't eat that ice cream! Give it to me!
Re: A Blind Child Speaks by Grandma	Rainbow_chaser 70.50.62.135	9-Mar-05/8:14 AM
i think this little poem is very sweet, and holds much truth. thank you for sharing. blessings ~Autumn