Re: Beetwen by Dovina	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.111	8-Mar-05/2:45 AM
Nicely put together D.
Re: Ode by James Rykelangeli	James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109	8-Mar-05/1:14 AM
Well done, old chap! 10.
Re: Fastso by Dovina	blacksoul 204.215.33.111	8-Mar-05/3:27 AM
I guess every smart ass comment is an image of the speaker's character? I don't think so! It's there opinion!
Re: Beetwen by Dovina	blacksoul 204.215.33.111	8-Mar-05/3:17 AM
Dovina I let my son read your poem he's in the fifth grade, and they are just beginning to study chaos. He was very amazed the way you had it organized.
Re: What went wrong with America? (An essay) by Jeremi B. Handrinos	the_poetess 205.188.116.135	7-Mar-05/7:28 PM
i couldnt even be bothered to read this - this site is for poetry not essay - 5 because it looks like you might have put effort in any way -emili
Re: Get Away by Miggy	the_poetess 205.188.116.135	7-Mar-05/7:30 PM
for some who sick of complaining you seem to whining alot - 3 - - emili
Re: Get Away by Miggy	RION12 64.136.26.226	7-Mar-05/7:39 PM
I thought it was ok.
Re: Crazy by that_funny_girl	RION12 64.136.26.226	7-Mar-05/7:43 PM
I really don't understand all of it but the parts I do understand make the poem sound good.
Re: Disfigure by DevilBuni	RION12 64.136.26.226	7-Mar-05/7:59 PM
I rate you 10.
Re: What? by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	RION12 64.136.26.226	7-Mar-05/8:12 PM
Dude this was great. I don't think you read me this one but I know what you mean.
Re: Nothing And Everything by DaRkMoOnLuVeR	RION12 64.136.26.226	7-Mar-05/8:17 PM
For some reason when one person writes the first time the second always follows with I agree with who ever was first. That's stuipd but funny. Who were you talking about in the poem?
Re: Memories by RION12	JoyLuck 65.60.139.26	7-Mar-05/8:17 PM
i wish i could erase my memory of reading this poem.
Re: A friend told me by RION12	DaRkMoOnLuVeR 67.162.99.24	7-Mar-05/8:29 PM
Dude, Eli, who told u that?! I don't remember ME saying that. . .Was it Sergio?! Anyway, LOVELY! MY VERY FIRST FAV!
Re: Memories by RION12	DaRkMoOnLuVeR 67.162.99.24	7-Mar-05/8:35 PM
Jebus, this is why I say you are my best friend. . .New one, you should've read me it first, Eli!!! >.< I love it. You know why, too.
regarding some deleted poem...	James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109	7-Mar-05/11:13 PM
very good: clearly communicated sentiments, clever language, strong structure. repeating "the" at the end of l10 and the start of l11 is particularly felicitous. i have several questions, however. first, i assumed the passenger was a child (i.e. describing buildings as blocks, noting the children at play, wishing to engage in tactile experiences common to children, "begging" the driver.) but on the other hand, you say the speaker wishes to "find a poem today," which is a more mature sentiment that's incongruous with the previous descriptions. this might be a question of narrative voices (i.e. you are interpreting or clarifying the passenger's immature thoughts.) but the following philosophical reflection on circular thought seems even more incongruous and cannot be easily explained away by narrative voices, so the poem comes off as bipolar: at once the voice of a child and a philosophical poet. last, i find difficulty with the poem's name: the wren's circling doesn't seem apt for describing the passenger's mode of thinking: "I want to lag behind the others." although i understand you might say that the passenger’s thoughts keep circling back to objects outside the car, i think the link to actually circling an idea or desire, approaching it from different angles, and eventually coming or failing to come to some conclusion is weak. rather, i think it seems more like a discursive thought process reflecting on lagging behind to experience nature, the fence, etc. overall, though, the poem is well done.
Re: Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter by DurtKL	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	8-Mar-05/5:23 AM
have you ever been to Cardiff? - 10 -
Re: Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter by DurtKL	edpeterson 68.79.52.31	8-Mar-05/9:59 AM
yah. this gives me a chubby.
Re: Retirement by Jeremi B. Handrinos	crooked_smile 205.188.116.135	8-Mar-05/11:52 AM
this appears to be a bunch of rambling nonsense - 3 - -lia
Re: Today, last year was on a Sunday by thepinkbunnyofdoom	DurtKL 65.60.139.26	8-Mar-05/1:24 PM
hello, pink bunny
Re: Fastso by Dovina	James Rykelangeli 169.229.90.109	7-Mar-05/11:33 PM
clear and clever imagery. the last two stanzas, however, are tritely phrased in comparison with the rest. also, since we don't know anything about the speaker, that she sympathizes with our corpulent friend has no effect on the reader beyond allowing him or her to make an inference about the speaker's character. otherwise, an enjoyable poem.