Re: ...on the Benefits of Being Ugly by Goad	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Mar-05/2:13 AM
I don't think you get that in limericks the rhyming words are supposed to be funny ones. Or even just odd ones, like - oh I don't know - 'laser,' 'Negro,' or 'rupture'.
Re: You Fell Asleep First by jessicazee	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Mar-05/5:07 AM
I know a Canadian here whose knobs log me off every time.
Re: The Reply by LintyWeenis	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Mar-05/5:10 AM
re "What can I say that hasn't already been said?" A lot of things, if you wrote about anything else :-(
Re: Oh! To be pressed against your windowpane by skaskowski	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Mar-05/5:12 AM
"part of" bothered me. The rest is really quite good.
Re: Fastso by Dovina	richa 81.178.193.41	7-Mar-05/8:28 AM
I don't think fat people tend to be jolly. I think they tend to be poor and hence have nothing to be jolly about :(
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.33.85	7-Mar-05/8:33 AM
The two commas in Line 4 add a charming hesitancy, which, mingled with the words “at least” must provide these oft-willing women with a sense dominance and control so often lacking where their pleasure is not foremost as implied in this lovely rendering.
Re: You Fell Asleep First by jessicazee	Dovina 12.72.33.85	7-Mar-05/8:42 AM
Except for some confusing spacing and "my phone calls are touching," which seems to change the focus, I like it.
Re: The Privaleged by i_am_the_popsicle	Dovina 12.72.33.85	7-Mar-05/9:09 AM
I didn't get past the first verse due to spelling.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.19.251	7-Mar-05/10:46 AM
funny
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.19.251	7-Mar-05/10:47 AM
If only you could find a way to introduce some ass buggery.
Re: Beetwen by Dovina	edpeterson 68.79.19.251	7-Mar-05/10:50 AM
metamorphose? Of course, this is bunk, but you know that. Points for different, but then you could use that fucked up font...what the fuck is it called?............Wingdings, and make it completely illegible.
Re: You Fell Asleep First by jessicazee	edpeterson 68.79.19.251	7-Mar-05/10:53 AM
Liked it better before. The language seemed clearer. The stuff you have added is interesting, but poorly worded, imho.
Re: The Reply by LintyWeenis	edpeterson 68.79.19.251	7-Mar-05/10:56 AM
Can't say I loved the poem, but I cannot give less than a 10 to "LintyWeenis"
Re: A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus	Jezabele-In-Hell 65.172.117.1	7-Mar-05/11:09 AM
Excellent. So far the best poem I have ever read!
regarding some deleted poem...	Jezabele-In-Hell 65.172.117.1	7-Mar-05/11:13 AM
I like it. It reminds me of me about 2 months ago before I got my love. Keep going for it, once you get it, you won't regret the pain you went through.
Re: Beetwen by Dovina	Crakyamuni 131.252.180.210	7-Mar-05/11:37 AM
Who's that folkish painter in the bronx, a latin man? That guy paints with words sometimes to instill the point that our minds have the amazing ability to organize chaos. I like the the concept at the end. I thnk this is nice.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.193.41	7-Mar-05/2:36 PM
Cute. But with it being a joke and all, I think the short lines and excessive punctuation are a bit too portentious. I mean punchlines shouldn't be so tortured, right?
Re: You Fell Asleep First by jessicazee	richa 81.178.193.41	7-Mar-05/2:40 PM
Should have kept ethnic studies. This is pretty much prose as well so there was little need for all the flashy effects. Not bad.
Re: Death is a Three Step Process by dancin_n_da_moonlite	richa 81.178.193.41	7-Mar-05/2:46 PM
Sudden Death Syndrome. Don't get the rest of it though.
Re: What am I doing? by INTRANSIT	crooked_smile 152.163.100.135	7-Mar-05/3:41 PM
this was interesting - and if flowed nicely - 8 - -lia