Re: Paris 1941-63 by Mister Cakes	Crakyamuni 131.252.230.71	8-Feb-05/12:03 PM
"Got more soul than a sock with a hole." Doom.
Re: Paris 1941-63 by Mister Cakes	Crakyamuni 131.252.230.71	8-Feb-05/12:01 PM
I'm not sure about the reference to the time period, but I think socks have sentimental value for poets.
Re: Confusion by jroday	Dovina 12.72.33.127	8-Feb-05/7:16 AM
Verse 4 is the way a lot of conversations go. Good description. There's no point in even talking when it goes like that. "Erects a sculpture from the brains of the lazy" is good too,
Re: Winged Victory by REWellman	Dovina 12.72.33.127	8-Feb-05/7:21 AM
From some story about an angel on a rock that I don't know. How we try to keep our stories in stone.
Re: The Disease Of The Dancing Cats by Mister Cakes	Goad 217.95.210.139	8-Feb-05/3:50 PM
There's apparently cats who will dance When at dark they at last have the chance Blah blah blah yadda yadda For us to care, dude, you've gotta The conceit with some PO'TRY enhance.
Re: Separation by Dovina	poodietat 68.51.106.137	8-Feb-05/9:14 AM
Sorry, I don't get it. Most of the poem seemed as if the character is choosing among competing doctrine, then we find out she already has a fatherless son -- indicating she's already made a choice. Maybe I'm not steeped enough in christian sects to understand this.
Re: Nuculer Power by MacFrantic	poodietat 68.51.106.137	8-Feb-05/9:19 AM
i like the double-meaning of "rings": "fusion rings" and "rings like".
Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad	poodietat 68.51.106.137	8-Feb-05/9:20 AM
hot
Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad	poodietat 68.51.106.137	8-Feb-05/9:20 AM
hot
Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad	poodietat 68.51.106.137	8-Feb-05/9:37 AM
hot
Re: Family Portrait by woodstock20000	Crakyamuni 131.252.230.71	8-Feb-05/12:06 PM
An average but drowsy diary entry might be better recieved from your Grandmother. I like nostalgia, it places us in the present, but this is not a poem.
Re: SHOT by tisa7	frdup717 64.12.116.67	8-Feb-05/1:37 PM
not2shabby
Re: IT All Starts With My Fears by tisa7	frdup717 64.12.116.67	8-Feb-05/1:41 PM
where did you learn how to write like that?
regarding some deleted poem...	frdup717 64.12.116.67	8-Feb-05/1:52 PM
wow man thats badass. a superfly -10-
Re: The Tree by Joe-joe	Dovina 12.72.33.52	8-Feb-05/2:21 PM
This is your best by far! What's got into you?
Re: Family Portrait by woodstock20000	Dovina 12.72.33.52	8-Feb-05/2:25 PM
Very clear and direct. A good picture. I would scratch the last two lines to give the reader more to ponder, less to be told.
Re: Concerto Chaotic by thepinkbunnyofdoom	SupremeDreamer 216.99.240.160	8-Feb-05/12:31 AM
Misspelled thighs. Bravo motherfucker.
Re: Separation by Dovina	richa 81.178.239.228	8-Feb-05/3:02 PM
I very much doubt you are an authoritative source on theology, so anything you write about religion per se is going to be misinformed and consequently valueless. The bit where you bring together the Lutherans and methodists and catholics and represent them as a kind of hierarchy is I guess interesting, but you go too far in your conclusions later on, and what the hell is all this about spewed from the mouth of god. The metaphor is utterly random and unrelated to the rest of the poem. I thought metaphors had to be built up.
Re: SHOT by tisa7	tisa7 4.10.233.198	8-Feb-05/3:36 PM
thanx
Re: Paris 1941-63 by Mister Cakes	Goad 217.95.210.139	8-Feb-05/3:39 PM
He spent 22 years in a sock? Champs-Elysées with some French dude named Jacques? Unless "sock" is a metaphor, For the crucial part of a whore -- In which case Mister Cakes is a cock.