Re: ……………………………………. by Prince of Void	Prince of Void 217.218.131.164	7-Feb-05/11:07 AM
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Re: a scene in american ghetto by cowmoo	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Feb-05/12:45 AM
"beakniks" - Great.
Re: Lust, and the Sad Soul by woodstock20000	Dovina 12.72.3.63	7-Feb-05/1:31 PM
Verse 2 is good because it first presumes an imortal soul, then with the word "would" casts doubt. Verse 3 is weak, for the cliche "to and fro," and for its bland wording.
Re: Sins of your father by poodietat	Dovina 12.72.3.63	7-Feb-05/1:45 PM
Almost too direct and pointed to be called a poem. Still, you got the point accross loudly. Not bad.
Re: Separation by Dovina	jroday 204.215.33.140	7-Feb-05/2:59 PM
"Ye can not drink the cup of the Lord, and the cup of devils: ye can not be partakers of the Lord's table, and of the devils." A doubleminded man is unstable." I love the beginning of verse two--Revelations
Re: Nuculer Power by MacFrantic	Mister Cakes 81.168.71.189	7-Feb-05/3:37 PM
Shit
Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad	Mister Cakes 81.168.71.189	7-Feb-05/3:38 PM
Not what i expected
regarding some deleted poem...	Mister Cakes 81.168.71.189	7-Feb-05/3:39 PM
Life is too short for this shit
Re: An intolerable rash brother by Crakyamuni	Mister Cakes 81.168.71.189	7-Feb-05/3:46 PM
great
Re: Separation by Dovina	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.140	7-Feb-05/3:49 PM
Love the poem!
Re: WAIT UNTIL THE END by celticskatermatt1	some deleted user 68.7.189.144	7-Feb-05/6:21 PM
this is pretty good
Re: WAIT UNTIL THE END by celticskatermatt1	some deleted user 68.7.189.144	7-Feb-05/6:22 PM
this is pretty good
Re: WAIT UNTIL THE END by celticskatermatt1	some deleted user 68.7.189.144	7-Feb-05/6:22 PM
this is pretty good
Re: Paris 1941-63 by Mister Cakes	MacFrantic 205.188.116.67	7-Feb-05/7:29 PM
it seems that you put about 2 seconds of thought into your poems. And that is not a compliment. *6*
Re: Provision by erin35	MacFrantic 205.188.116.67	7-Feb-05/7:34 PM
somewhat decent *8*
Re: Weary by erin35	sliver 64.12.116.135	7-Feb-05/10:26 PM
Yea, I feel it too. What can ya' do?
Re: Provision by erin35	sliver 64.12.116.135	7-Feb-05/10:29 PM
Trapped in the same circle as the rest of us, I see. Welome to the other side of humanity.
Re: Back Off by erin35	sliver 64.12.116.135	7-Feb-05/10:32 PM
This one just feels kind of stilted, for lack of a better word. Maybe choppy, no. well, I ramble. Perhaps just a bit smoother? Or... maybe it's just me, what the hell do I know.
Re: The Downfall of a Pagan Man by somemorepoetry	sliver 64.12.116.135	7-Feb-05/10:41 PM
I am at a loss for words. I love the way you mixed it all up, And painted such a picture.
Re: a scene in american ghetto by cowmoo	SupremeDreamer 216.99.240.160	8-Feb-05/12:27 AM
I'd call this a very rough draft, with a very disappointing ending. Time to edit boy. Six.