regarding some deleted poem...	PsydewaysTears 69.240.74.35	5-Feb-05/2:36 PM
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Re: Thanks (Dovina) by jroday	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.226	6-Feb-05/5:09 AM
Lovely poem of thanks. Friends how many of us have them? ReAlLy!!!!
Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Feb-05/12:37 AM
I wonder if you've seen this: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=100471
Re: You took my half dozen by poodietat	Goad 217.95.222.15	6-Feb-05/4:53 AM
far more interesting than the posts it is in reaction to. Great fun as an in-joke on societate de wanker. But it also stands alone, with that Bukowskian last line.
Re: a scene in american ghetto by cowmoo	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.226	6-Feb-05/5:04 AM
Hang in there! It will get better for you and your mother just believe, I know
Re: rear view mirror by damianlow	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/1:15 AM
Have I seen you on "Taxicab Confessions"?
Re: Clouds by dancin_n_da_moonlite	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/1:17 AM
The 'foil' and 'silver lining' part was cool. It doesn't make the rest of the poem worth it, though.
Re: DUI Violation by amateurR	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/1:19 AM
I like the last line. I would probably rewrite everything else. Try including some poetry along the way, and maybe making a couple of real sentences.
Re: On Being Born by emilyowey	zodiac 212.38.134.51	6-Feb-05/1:20 AM
Great. Are you really Emily Dickinson?
Re: Girly by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.218.59.51	6-Feb-05/9:57 AM
I really like this poem. It is very light-hearted with much sarcasm. I believe the last four lines would be better re-arranged as follows: "but I’m better off girly than a poetess, surely this poem of mine doesn't seem to rhyme" It puts the heavy-handed "girly conclusion" inside the poem and makes the end a "typically girly" comment(in the sacastic sense in which you write about the subject of girliness).
Re: black dog by wilco	daveslady 140.211.124.165	6-Feb-05/12:28 PM
poor little dog. Good poem.
Re: DUI Violation by amateurR	cowmoo 129.133.4.35	6-Feb-05/12:42 PM
I like it but the ending is elusive and not satisfying, please elaborate.
Re: Lent Begins by jessicazee	cowmoo 129.133.4.35	6-Feb-05/12:45 PM
I love your style, it is serene and surreal and smooth - although I am confused about the last line.
Re: My Time In Jail by Brittanyy	cowmoo 129.133.4.35	6-Feb-05/12:51 PM
love it.
Re: Nicholas Martin's last great paper by Bachus	Crakyamuni 65.54.97.193	6-Feb-05/3:00 PM
All this seems a little "unsettling" as do most beautiful things.
Re: just can't by shygirl1619	Goad 84.140.206.60	6-Feb-05/5:10 PM
A shy girl who was recently dumped On PR with her poetry jumped. We'll do nothing but damn her For spelling and grammar And rhyme have -- like love -- got her stumped.
Re: Thanks (Dovina) by jroday	Dovina 12.72.3.226	6-Feb-05/9:09 PM
The first verse of this poem is the most tender and nicely worded sentiment I have read in a long time. Some people on this site will say I’m just swooning to a line. Let them talk, because I believe you. I’ll give them their only satisfaction by saying that the second verse is a bit cliché, but it too is something I believe you mean. The third verse matches the first in warmth and tenderness, and the line, “even when you don’t understand” is perfect. Thank you jroday, you’ve been through a lot and come through strong.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.3.226	6-Feb-05/9:13 PM
Isn't it a bit arogant to say that's your only flaw? I assume you're exaggerating purposely. But because I don't know, only a 6.
Re: Ann & Dan & I by Goad	Dovina 12.72.3.226	6-Feb-05/9:14 PM
Terrible, but funny.
Re: Lust, and the Sad Soul by woodstock20000	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Feb-05/12:43 AM
You mean "It shudders in its own immortality." And "its" in the next line, too. "wonders" should be "wanders". And you can't wander "along" a place. You can wander along a promenade, the bank of a winding creek, or nearly anything else commonly understood as having length. A "place" does not.