| Re: Paris 1941-63 by Mister Cakes |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
9-Feb-05/9:00 AM |
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wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249 |
9-Feb-05/8:27 AM |
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Utterly brilliant -1,000,000,000,000-
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| Re: Suicide..... by *.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* |
*.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* 65.93.39.232 |
9-Feb-05/3:26 PM |
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Please Vote or leave a comment I just want to know if it is good or not to keep writing poems on here.....<:(
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| Re: An American Valentine by Wulf |
*.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* 65.93.39.232 |
9-Feb-05/3:37 PM |
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thats amazing really read soem of my poems
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
celticskatermatt1 68.7.189.144 |
9-Feb-05/4:38 PM |
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| Re: Reverse Pschology by Mister Cakes |
Goad 217.95.210.139 |
8-Feb-05/4:04 PM |
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Here's a pome that's naught more than an anagram
Of a word with a y that's gone on the lam
I assume you've some meaning
In there for the gleaning
But if none can construe it, who gives a damne?
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| Re: Confusion by jroday |
al-naafiysh 204.215.33.121 |
8-Feb-05/4:37 PM |
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I agree with Dovina on verse 4 since joining P.R., and reading some of the comments Mr.jroday you hit the hammer on the nail.
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| Re: Camera Obscura by Fear of Garbage |
Goad 217.95.210.139 |
8-Feb-05/5:00 PM |
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Christ, this is a good fucking poem.
I read it a year ago, and it was still in my head...so I came looking for it. And it's still gold.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 12.72.10.103 |
9-Feb-05/2:07 PM |
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If you proofread this, which aparently you didn't, you'll find all sorts of spelling, punctuation, and grammar mistakes. But the biggest mistake is the ending, which some young depressed fool might read and take just enough encouragement from to do it.
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| Re: Epitaph of Innocence by woodstock20000 |
Dovina 12.72.10.103 |
9-Feb-05/2:11 PM |
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Nonsense! The world is not lost as you say. 0 for content, 5 for poetic form.
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| Re: quickie by calliope |
*.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* 65.93.39.232 |
9-Feb-05/2:47 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
*.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* 65.93.39.232 |
9-Feb-05/2:47 PM |
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Alright to sappy for me lol ...7..
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| Re: Charles by neurula |
*.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* 65.93.39.232 |
9-Feb-05/2:48 PM |
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| Re: The punch drunk underwriter by horus8 |
*.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* 65.93.39.232 |
9-Feb-05/2:49 PM |
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| Re: Lent Begins by jessicazee |
*.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* 65.93.39.232 |
9-Feb-05/2:50 PM |
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haha love your poem ..10..
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
*.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* 65.93.39.232 |
9-Feb-05/3:11 PM |
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| Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
9-Feb-05/8:02 AM |
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| Re: Wedding Poem by al-naafiysh |
jroday 204.215.34.146 |
9-Feb-05/12:24 PM |
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| Re: Wedding Poem by al-naafiysh |
Dovina 12.72.10.103 |
9-Feb-05/2:01 PM |
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Why do you say, "My goal is . . ." in verse 4, giving a way out, when you don't in the others?
"perfect union" is impossible and weakens the aparently possible committments.
"them" in the last verse is a bit nebulous, and I wonder why you even include this verse.
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| Re: I wanna die by scitz |
*.*ReAdY To SnAp*.* 65.93.39.232 |
9-Feb-05/3:25 PM |
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I love it....Out standing vote some of mine plase
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