| Re: Never Said Thank You by unouluvme |
some deleted user 152.163.100.67 |
28-Jan-05/7:06 PM |
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| Re: Never Said Thank You by unouluvme |
some deleted user 152.163.100.67 |
28-Jan-05/7:07 PM |
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Sorry- hit a 6 by accident--I give you a ten!
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Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
29-Jan-05/12:25 AM |
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Wow, this is top notch, better than anything you've written in a while.
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| Re: thoughts on a long lazy day by francis nor capule |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:22 PM |
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the leaving lines are too close together, I think. Maybe you were going for a repetition thing there, but I think it would work better if you changed one of the leavings to something else.
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| Re: Devil, Devil, Hear Me Pray by PsydewaysTears |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:26 PM |
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I've never understood the whole Devil worship thing. If you believe in that whole fairy tale about God and the Devil, why would you choose to worship the one thats going to make you suffer forever...must be a masochist. Anyway, some of the lines aren't bad, the subject notwithstanding.
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wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:28 PM |
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Nice, as usual, but not your best, I think.
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| Re: Never Said Thank You by unouluvme |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:31 PM |
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Reminds me of that Jimmy Eats World song....Not bad, but you could stand to put a little more thought into it. Seems more like just emotion.
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| Re: just can't by shygirl1619 |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:34 PM |
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Spelling and grammar. Need to fix deez things, yo.
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| Re: Ode to a Friend by tadpole |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:39 PM |
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This should be under acrostic. No offense, but I'm not lovin' this one...
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| Re: Hades Ain't Far Enough by MacFrantic |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:41 PM |
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| Re: This > That...Why? by MacFrantic |
wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:42 PM |
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Not lovin' this one as much. Not too bad, but doesn't really stand out.
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wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:44 PM |
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Makes me a little horny, but that's about it. I'd like to see some other topic by you...most anything would do.
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wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:48 PM |
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ummmm, ok. Well, you've got this..."Death isn't frightening but dying is." Thats not too bad...I think maybe you should try to work on your stuff a little...maybe not just try to get something posted immediately when you CAN. I'm guilty of the same thing but I've tried to curb that and actually think things out before I post them...anyway, just some unsolicited advice.
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wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:50 PM |
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Regarding this poem: Please see my comment on your previous post and the comment on CLS's previous post.
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wilco 24.165.207.93 |
28-Jan-05/6:53 PM |
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Please see my comment on your previous post and on Lydia Evelyn's post. This is better than the last, though.
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some deleted user 152.163.100.67 |
28-Jan-05/7:02 PM |
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WOW Sliver--and you still get better ratings then I do...and i try, not too hard ( then my bubble doesn't burst) You are truly a poet. Maybe someday I will be as good as you.
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some deleted user 152.163.100.67 |
28-Jan-05/7:04 PM |
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I seriously thought it was my computer screen, or the page didn't load right, but no, it was a poem that my poet cousin wrote!
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zodiac 217.144.15.36 |
29-Jan-05/2:45 AM |
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"I will brake in to a million little pieces."
LOLTTM!
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Dovina 205.184.71.11 |
29-Jan-05/10:59 AM |
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Too fragile . . . to move on. Yes!
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horus8 24.130.62.63 |
29-Jan-05/5:38 PM |
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See, that wasn't that hard now was it?
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