Re: Hades Ain't Far Enough by MacFrantic	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	28-Jan-05/10:11 AM
"dread upon the dalliers" - nice I like this one, MF.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 205.184.71.11	27-Jan-05/11:28 AM
I have to read this several times to resalize the sequence of events. Would prefer to know a glass of wine is falling in the first verse. A riddle it is. Speaking from the glass's pov is quite nice however.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 205.184.71.11	27-Jan-05/11:49 AM
Do you mean "Tucked into an ice sculpture"? mollusk? chiseled?
Re: Devil, Devil, Hear Me Pray by PsydewaysTears	Dovina 205.184.71.11	27-Jan-05/11:58 AM
Anything with suicide in it deserves a zero, but because of Verse 4 and the first half of Verse 6, you get a 7.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 205.184.71.11	27-Jan-05/12:08 PM
Aparently it was worth all of this and all of another what?--fifty more years. Who knows what erotic pleasure lies in a sixty-year-old's bed?
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 205.184.71.11	27-Jan-05/12:30 PM
Yes, funny. Mascara goes on eyelashes and eyebrows, not on skin.
Re: Your Eyes Are Like Stearling Saphires in the month of June by tisa7	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	27-Jan-05/2:37 PM
Hi t7 - a pretty thing, but a couple spellings: "Sterling", "Sapphires" and "threw" should be "through" and I don't know if you meant "painful" or did the painflu on purpose. "in to" should prolly be "into"
Re: In Answer To Your Question by Dovina	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	27-Jan-05/2:59 PM
3 spaces between comma and the "I'll" in the 3rd stanza I guess it works as a "prose poem" - but why? This could be said in far fewer words and cleaner as a less verbose (or nounose) poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	unouluvme 66.167.67.53	27-Jan-05/3:53 PM
thats not even yours
Re: Activating your Infinity by horus8	unouluvme 66.167.67.53	27-Jan-05/3:54 PM
to much like a story
Re: The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	unouluvme 66.167.67.53	27-Jan-05/4:09 PM
what the fuck?
Re: just can't by shygirl1619	peaceseeker 63.164.145.85	27-Jan-05/5:59 PM
you can do it! do something else, now.
Re: ... by shygirl1619	wilco 24.165.207.93	27-Jan-05/6:45 PM
Work on your spelling and put line breaks in te right places and this isn't half bad.
Re: Your Eyes Are Like Stearling Saphires in the month of June by tisa7	wilco 24.165.207.93	27-Jan-05/6:47 PM
simple but pretty.
Re: In Answer To Your Question by Dovina	wilco 24.165.207.93	27-Jan-05/6:50 PM
But you'll never say those things because you're a woman.
Re: Your Eyes Are Like Stearling Saphires in the month of June by tisa7	tisa7 4.10.233.198	27-Jan-05/7:29 PM
thank you me and a friend thought of it while thinking of our boy friends
Re: Waiting for October by wilco	Shuushin 70.16.208.65	27-Jan-05/8:12 PM
"The flower’s been washed clean." specify flower - fix meter. "The ghosts are coming through" - weak description - fixable.
Re: thoughts on a long lazy day by francis nor capule	Shuushin 70.16.208.65	27-Jan-05/8:13 PM
purity often wins.
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 172.189.154.57	28-Jan-05/1:23 AM
monogamy even (what an ass)
Re: Waiting for October by wilco	Dovina 205.184.70.141	28-Jan-05/11:10 AM
A sad wait indeed. For what? Seems like it needs to say what she's waiting for.