regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	12-Jan-05/6:11 AM
Could probably do without stating the obvious last line. Actually. Probably the whole last third. A good idea, if overwrought.
Re: medieval myth by ThePariahDog	Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25	12-Jan-05/7:05 AM
Nice :)
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	Lifeboatman 203.104.94.2	12-Jan-05/5:37 PM
this is great... 10
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	12-Jan-05/6:37 AM
Really like the first bit with the hand/understand, corn/dawn; and the charred angels. It needs more of those more subtle rhymes like corn/dawn. Subjects like loss or rejection, in particular, can sound trite pretty quickly when hard and exact rhymes are used. then I'm put off a bit by the multiple use of the cloud/shroud partnering, and the loss metaphors are laid on fairly thick. Give me one or two nicely worked and fresh images rather than five or six overcooked ones. anyway, still shows promise and I can easily see why you want to keep working on it.
Re: Moon and History by kawakurdi	Bhaskaryya 61.3.137.25	12-Jan-05/7:09 AM
Awesome!!!
Re: Can't Fight No More by jroday	blacksoul 204.215.33.112	12-Jan-05/1:50 PM
I know this is just a poem, and no more than that. When we were growing up, you always told us not to give up no matter what. For the poem dad I give you a -10-,but if you have really given up I give you; which I believe is a lie. 00000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	12-Jan-05/2:00 PM
nice
Re: Veins by helenwales	helenwales 202.148.234.49	11-Jan-05/9:36 PM
It was about a baby. Not a nice presence though. Perhaps an unwanted child. Sometimes babies can feel like a growth with an inevitable, unstoppable birth and impact on your life. (No I don't have children and yes I intend too ;-).
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 212.118.11.30	11-Jan-05/9:59 PM
If you've ever touched peyote in your life, I'm a tumbling clod. Incidentally, 'tumbling clods' is my new term for everything on poemranker.
regarding some deleted poem...	jauser 63.20.161.41	11-Jan-05/10:46 PM
wow too long, I wouldn't want to read it all so here's a 4
regarding some deleted poem...	blacksoul 204.215.33.112	12-Jan-05/2:01 PM
May God bless you on that special day.
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	blacksoul 204.215.33.112	12-Jan-05/2:02 PM
Very nice
regarding some deleted poem...	jauser 63.20.197.216	12-Jan-05/8:06 PM
why am I giving you a ten? oh, well. Haha jk beautiful work blancochico
regarding some deleted poem...	jauser 63.20.197.216	12-Jan-05/8:07 PM
simple but beautiful
Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	jauser 63.20.197.216	12-Jan-05/8:13 PM
damnit I thought the poeam was long, the comments is even longer
regarding some deleted poem...	jauser 63.20.197.216	12-Jan-05/8:15 PM
don't jump
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.72.4.207	12-Jan-05/9:58 PM
Let's hope they give rise to more, that these fertilize, and that the time to rest is far away.
Re: Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic	Dovina 12.72.4.207	12-Jan-05/10:05 PM
It flows nicely and contains some awsome images, but altogether, it lacks motive and is too broad. It fails to pinpoint any real life issue.
Re: The Unsung Hero by Bhaskaryya	Dovina 12.72.4.207	12-Jan-05/10:13 PM
A good flow and a good point.
Re: Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.220	12-Jan-05/11:13 PM
-10- The 'preverts' in line 13 is sheer genius. The only improvement I would add might be to change the last word from ball to balls.