| Re: 10.25.04 by oneglove |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
22-Dec-04/10:57 PM |
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You must be a gothic marauder.
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| Re: Drowned in Free Verse by auscot |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
22-Dec-04/10:59 PM |
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| Re: I have Learned to Let Go by Joe-joe |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
22-Dec-04/11:00 PM |
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The raping of a wet hand towel.
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| Re: Andrew part II by Spindle |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
22-Dec-04/11:03 PM |
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"Absolute chestnut!!" I could not best this comment, so here it is again. (For some reason every time I read it, I burst).
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| Re: Walk The Boy To Circles by horus8 |
Bhaskaryya 212.162.192.165 |
23-Dec-04/12:13 AM |
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Why don't you just drop the arrogance?? People have the right to comment what they think?? I didn't say your poem SUCKS. I liked it just fine, but I though it could have been improved. Anything wrong witrh improvements???
Isn't this what the comment box is for.. To leave your honest views?? I am not here to please your vanity or prick it either. I just told you what I honestly thought to be true. And besides, I have read much classier villanelles. I'd never accept it if you say PERHAPS and DRIPS are perfect rhymes.
Come and tear my work apart. I'd appreciate it. But please stop taking out your spite on me. I am here to improve my poetry,not to share kick ass poems.
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| Re: Walk The Boy To Circles by horus8 |
Bhaskaryya 61.0.144.77 |
23-Dec-04/4:24 AM |
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Happy Holidays to you, my good sir!!
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| Re: Disable by blacksoul |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50 |
23-Dec-04/4:48 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
richa 81.178.233.69 |
23-Dec-04/6:38 AM |
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The syllable count is not 5-7-5
The poems fail to not rhyme
The poems are not japanese
The poems are not about nature.
Now I am as liberal as anyone as to what constitutes a haiku but for goodness sake. What exactly did you think a haiku was.
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| Re: The Slave by Bhaskaryya |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
22-Dec-04/11:07 PM |
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Sounds like that neeger wants a leetle white wheestle.
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Bhaskaryya 212.162.192.165 |
22-Dec-04/11:54 PM |
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My first attempt at Haikus. Wrote all these within an hour yesterday.
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| Re: there's no way out by oneglove |
Bhaskaryya 212.162.192.165 |
22-Dec-04/11:57 PM |
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Not bad!! But what does AGAINS mean??
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Yikes 205.188.116.67 |
23-Dec-04/9:56 AM |
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mmm... this was beautiful! I knew that the brilliant scoundral had to be here somewhere and while scrolling down the names I say, "Hey! There's ed!". The mood was sustained nicely in this and the pictures... reminded me of something in a song.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Yikes 205.188.116.67 |
23-Dec-04/9:57 AM |
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A poem I've read elsewhere many times and, if I may, a litterary masterpiece. Had to vote on this one, it's a classic.
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Yikes 205.188.116.67 |
23-Dec-04/9:59 AM |
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Ahh the element. You know, I'd yet to read the third to your series. I don't think I could weigh any of them on any sort of scale. Once more, so much poetic element. Well done!
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| Re: "oh" by fevriere |
Yikes 205.188.116.67 |
23-Dec-04/10:01 AM |
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Ahh so appeasing. Bravo! The true art of a "Haiku-ist"
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| Re: there's no way out by oneglove |
Yikes 205.188.116.67 |
23-Dec-04/10:08 AM |
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Quite melancholy. You've done a great job at holding the tone of this piece. Also, the descriptions were phenominal. 10, bravo.
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oneglove 67.96.11.143 |
23-Dec-04/10:41 AM |
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for all the imagery in the poem the last line hit really flat, but very good overall
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| Re: "oh" by fevriere |
richa 81.178.233.69 |
23-Dec-04/11:28 AM |
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Fine idea for a poem. Not sure the relevance of the sea allusions. 'A syllable aches' would probably be better.
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Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
23-Dec-04/12:02 PM |
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You prayed to nothing, and nothing, i.e., God, raped you?
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| Re: there's no way out by oneglove |
Dovina 69.175.6.101 |
23-Dec-04/1:15 PM |
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