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edpeterson 68.79.60.123 |
10-Nov-04/7:53 PM |
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what a coincidence! she is my soul too!
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Fayt 65.237.254.50 |
10-Nov-04/7:28 PM |
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Fayt 65.237.254.50 |
10-Nov-04/7:33 PM |
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i like this one, it flows nicely.
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| Re: i`m tired by shazpen |
Fayt 65.237.254.50 |
10-Nov-04/7:34 PM |
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| Re: Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus |
Fayt 65.237.254.50 |
10-Nov-04/7:36 PM |
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i really like this one, nice job.
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| Re: Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus |
edpeterson 68.79.60.123 |
10-Nov-04/7:46 PM |
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zodiac 212.118.14.17 |
10-Nov-04/10:36 PM |
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Let me be the first among us to say, "Thanks, Crystal Lane Swift's Mom."
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| Re: Knives by SwiftFox |
sliver 63.190.80.133 |
10-Nov-04/11:15 PM |
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It's a good thought,Really good. But I think you should think it through further. Expand, expound, eh?
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| Re: A Spring bird in November (Edit) by Sasha |
sliver 63.190.80.133 |
10-Nov-04/11:17 PM |
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I especially like the comparison,unclear roads...
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| Re: Bowie Still Gives Me a Bonner by phauge |
sliver 63.190.80.133 |
10-Nov-04/11:19 PM |
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sliver 63.190.80.133 |
10-Nov-04/11:24 PM |
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Does she know you are comparing her to spiders and ants? 16 huh?
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sliver 63.190.80.133 |
10-Nov-04/11:31 PM |
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My parents raised me the same way, Only hipocracy from my mother now tho'. It's funny you should say treat your neighbor as yourself, I'm thinking of naming my business D.U.O. Services. Do Unto Others.
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sliver 63.190.80.133 |
10-Nov-04/11:37 PM |
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Great, If there is one thing that jumped out at me,it would be s.4 l2, Delete "it".
She... Must have seen you weep
Deep behind hind the willow tree
Where you watched her toss her hair
And it made you wish she cared
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| Re: Thereâs A Voice Deep Inside My Head by celticskatermatt1 |
sliver 63.190.80.133 |
10-Nov-04/11:43 PM |
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If this is what you want do say, that's o.k, But re-write, again and again. Where to begin? In the first stanza, using dread, and then beating it 'till it's dead, No. Buy a Thesourus, find a chorus, and next time... try not to bore us. But KEEP WRITING.
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sliver 63.190.80.133 |
10-Nov-04/11:49 PM |
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I would leave the same comment that someone left on my poem 'To My Love'... This probably doesn't mean much except to you and the person you wrote it for. Except, I know, It means so much more, Or at least I thought so at the time. Thanx ED.
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sliver 63.190.80.133 |
10-Nov-04/11:57 PM |
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The shadow of THIS mortal CONSTANTLY questions my fate, But it's all about morals anyway! Right?
A few miscpewings. elliminate the dash between mime artist. Other than that???
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| Re: Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone |
horus8 198.81.26.16 |
10-Nov-04/3:50 PM |
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This is a fabulous pot roast. The best.
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edpeterson 68.79.60.123 |
10-Nov-04/3:51 PM |
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quick, take the ice out of the refrigerator! It is leaking all over the weenies!
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horus8 198.81.26.16 |
10-Nov-04/4:01 PM |
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This is no sonnet, but instead;
A well pinched loaf of bread.
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| Re: A Spring bird in November (Edit) by Sasha |
horus8 198.81.26.16 |
10-Nov-04/4:03 PM |
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