Re: Hoopla by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	20-Sep-04/2:38 AM
Shuper
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	20-Sep-04/1:25 AM
http://tinyurl.com/4a7j4
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	20-Sep-04/1:26 AM
http://tinyurl.com/4l5lp
Re: NO TIME!! by Brandy_n_Cali	AM I EVIL? 24.71.61.94	19-Sep-04/10:15 PM
I REALLY ENJOID READING THIS PEICE ITS VERY DARK MYSTERIOUS
regarding some deleted poem...	AM I EVIL? 24.71.61.94	19-Sep-04/10:10 PM
I WOULD LIKE TO THANK U FOR YOUR COMMENT,BUT I WOULD LIKE U TO READ MY UNTITLED AND FALLING ASLEEP,THANX AGAIN
Re: Winters Death by Brandy_n_Cali	AM I EVIL? 24.71.61.94	19-Sep-04/10:17 PM
I LIKE THE FLOW BUT I DONT NO WHAT U MEAN?
Re: Dads are suppose to stay by Brandy_n_Cali	AM I EVIL? 24.71.61.94	19-Sep-04/10:21 PM
I REALLY LIKES THIS 1 EVERYTHING ABOUT IT IS HEARTFELT AND SOULFILLED
Re: Soft Beak; Hard lotion by Bachus	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	19-Sep-04/4:40 PM
line upon line of shit.
Re: Lynched by Bachus	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	19-Sep-04/4:43 PM
Pure - sheer and absolute shit!
Re: Chocolate Rabbit Ears & Gay Sex by Bachus	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	19-Sep-04/4:32 PM
Just silly.
Re: Polyester Mustache by Bachus	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	19-Sep-04/4:33 PM
Dumb!
Re: Strange Days, Indeed by Bachus	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	19-Sep-04/4:36 PM
Bad writing,indeed!
Re: Glass Flowers by Bachus	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	19-Sep-04/4:39 PM
You are as convicted as a very bad poet - blown prose!
Re: THE GAME by jroday	klosterfobik 205.188.116.140	19-Sep-04/5:36 PM
Is this Bachus?Sounds like him.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	20-Sep-04/2:37 AM
There once was a dog named Dovina, Whom tried to lick herself cleaner, Whilst her bum she did rim, She chanced on her quim, Which tasted of stale Oringina.
Re: Jarooomeee by klosterfobik	Tintagiles 142.166.239.10	19-Sep-04/6:09 PM
This is without a doubt the most blatant case of idiotic self-voting I have yet seen. As a poem, this fails for a simple reason: if you start off with a rhyming quatrain, you should not round it off with three unrhyming verses even more lacking in rhythmic distinction than the first four.
Re: She washed over me by nentwined	<~> 204.251.238.10	19-Sep-04/7:51 PM
oy. ready? set? crit: She washed over me like water, >>k—washed over me doesn’t need to be qualified with ‘like water’—>>economize your words for greater effect. and I knew love like love had never known; >>abstract she wriggled into every crevice, licked me clean, then left-- >>okay, now we’re getting somewhere. Was it a salty tongue, like >>sharkskin, so smooth on the approach yet tearing and scraping >>like sandpaper as it pulled away? but she came back, caressed me down, deeper still. >>and what did that feel like? She went and came like some sick little game >>yep. Yep. Very clear to me. and I was stone, alone and uncertain; >> I have a hard time with stones being uncertain. They don’t roll. >>They know where they’ll wake up tomorrow. They know what they are >>going to wear tonight. And they definitely know if they look fat >>in that. her visitations slowly eroded my hesitation and I became used to her comings and goings. >>tides? To repeat the water/comparison to elementals metaphor? We settled into a long routine, then: love when she was there >>delete “then” and happy rememberings on her trips away. >>both of you settled into this >both of you with the happy rememberings? Slowly, though, she found my deep imperfections and seeping into them she'd leave a piece of herself behind to whip cold and hot. >>finding and seeping cold maybe be better verbs? More insidious? She'd tell herself tales when she returned and slowly I cracked, I crumbled, >>what sort of tales? About what? Why? And how did it come >>about that you heard them? and she'd whisk those pieces away, rounding them to pebbles, then sand while I remained less and less. >>again, delete “then” The strength of her love never waned and in time it became too much for what was left of me, one raw stone, and I let go. >>you never showed us that she loved you, only that she tortures you I entered her to and fro, another pawn of her whimsy to slowly be rounded to nothing through pleasure. >>apart from ‘pawn’ being overused, the rounding to nothing slowly through pleasure is quite good.
Re: The Bleeding Rose by BleedingRose	Jezabele-In-Hell 68.18.3.217	19-Sep-04/8:14 PM
I really like that one. Can't explain why....just do :)
Re: AIDS in a Doug by horus8	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	20-Sep-04/2:43 AM
There once was some AIDS in a Jug, Which had held a bottle of Krug, It transpired the drink, Was poured down the sink, To be replaced by the semen of your friend, Doug.
Re: Jarooomeee by klosterfobik	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	20-Sep-04/2:53 AM
You are a colossal pair of Michael Winner's unwashed pants.