Re: featherlight hands by darkshark	eyrbare 64.33.190.47	10-Aug-04/9:59 PM
Great description, only thing I'm not sure about is the line breaks.
Re: soulless by ThePariahDog	Prince of Void 217.218.131.140	10-Aug-04/11:06 AM
really nice a very good poem
Re: A fish, or what's left of one by phbiscuit	eyrbare 64.33.190.47	10-Aug-04/9:57 PM
Nice, I've been playing around with a poem that has a similar theme to this. =-)
Re: A beautiful moment by freelancejoker	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Aug-04/11:20 AM
Too etherial for me, but some nice lines.
Re: Mississippi Burnin. by SupremeDreamer	jroday 209.26.169.117	10-Aug-04/5:06 AM
What is the concept behind this poem? before i make any comment.
Re: One dot.And the rest is our lives by Prince of Void	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Aug-04/11:23 AM
Something to ponder for forty days and nights, inspiring.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Aug-04/11:18 AM
This is reelly quite good, but you shouldn't have given yourself a 10, otherwise I might have.
Re: Secret Password by freelancejoker	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Aug-04/11:22 AM
Sounds Christian, okay if it is. Cryptic, okay too. High on wine, yep, that's me.
Re: I CANNOT FUCKAT2POEMS by daggatolar	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Aug-04/11:36 AM
You don't need to sing or sign your name at the bottom, dagga, sir. Your dame has sighed or sung it already. Five, really?
Re: A Rally by hobojo	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Aug-04/11:28 AM
"looked down on his throne" is thrown from the middle ages and a great line. "Surely they're shared" is not, try they've. Overall, an inspiring thought.
Re: One dot.And the rest is our lives by Prince of Void	unknown^user 209.234.180.162	10-Aug-04/12:35 PM
More visual art than poetry, especially when taken in a poetic context, but powerful nonetheless.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Aug-04/12:28 PM
Sounds like a comment on a good poem or a good comment on a medochre poem. Do you mean the scales on a garter snake? I can't imagine "nothing left to say" unless you mean death. The bull goes on forever.
Re: Punk Rock Christmas by unknown^user	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Aug-04/8:10 AM
When you say "fucking shoes" it implies some angst with the shod, and "no fucking raver" some reason to rave, but since you show none, the poem would be stronger without these. I can't relate poem to title without stretching my karma.
Re: A Rally by hobojo	unknown^user 209.234.180.162	10-Aug-04/12:04 PM
Aye, good cleaning up. Also, I have a problem with "I sat in a cloud." With all of the Western imagery associated with clouds, it's difficult to put yourself in (or on) one and still have the reader believe that you are lonesome and/or depressed. Think of Zeuss, angels, and of course, Mick Jagger!
Re: A beautiful moment by freelancejoker	unknown^user 209.234.180.162	10-Aug-04/2:06 PM
Easy for most nature lovers to identify with, and your use of repetitions is well-received, at least by me. Looks like a lot of effort and appreciation went into this. Have to knock you for giving your own poem a 10 though (remember, your IP is always logged whether logged in or not). Well done though.
Re: OLD AGE BLUES by massangel62	Dovina 24.52.157.176	10-Aug-04/8:00 AM
Let's hope there's more to old age than a kindly smile given to friends who's minds are as far gone as yours. Use it or lose it, like having the presence of mind to put your comment to somebody's comment right under their comment. By the way, your poem starts off well enough, I just think the ending could be a lot better.
Re: The Sky and the Pond by somemorepoetry	unknown^user 68.107.136.25	10-Aug-04/9:36 PM
This is very well-written. I'm always drawn to these poems which seem to expand the reflection of a single moment and tell a story of feelings instead of events. I especially like this because it really made no sense to me until I read into the things that seemed out of place. I feel that the introduction of the characters is a little too strong since the conclusion doesn't really wrap up their stories.
Re: I CANNOT FUCKAT2POEMS by daggatolar	Doug 64.12.116.70	10-Aug-04/5:49 PM
Bravo - well done.
regarding some deleted poem...	Doug 64.12.116.70	10-Aug-04/5:54 PM
I like everything save the last two lines - change 'em up and suprise me.
regarding some deleted poem...	nentwined 66.92.28.14	10-Aug-04/2:14 PM
cute. I think the first few lines could have more feeling in them, especially given your response to Dovina.