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some deleted user 68.121.194.222 |
10-Aug-04/4:29 AM |
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| Re: today i just feel like swearing alot. But i won't. by Patsy |
MacFrantic 198.81.26.16 |
9-Aug-04/11:59 AM |
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| Re: The Reason by frdup717 |
tisa7 4.14.129.6 |
9-Aug-04/6:49 PM |
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| Re: Remember by psychedelic |
sanity 80.43.130.3 |
8-Aug-04/9:33 AM |
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| Re: today i just feel like swearing alot. But i won't. by Patsy |
basit_i 209.148.207.63 |
9-Aug-04/12:09 PM |
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Much too many questions this raises.
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Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
9-Aug-04/3:18 PM |
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Not bad. Just clean up a few grammar glytches.
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| Re: Reaction: Photo-Hung Over the Euphrates by eyrbare |
MacFrantic 198.81.26.16 |
9-Aug-04/11:38 AM |
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Wonderfully put, and I think that repeating "cold and black was perfect. *9*
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bwickl11 67.119.227.58 |
9-Aug-04/1:19 PM |
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I really like this one, but I thought you didn't like the beach =p
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| Re: Concussion + Broken Hearts= bad week by New Life Drug |
bwickl11 67.119.227.58 |
9-Aug-04/1:47 PM |
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Well written! The metaphors bouncing back and forth are really powerful.
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| Re: A Letter to You by QuirkyWonder |
bwickl11 67.119.227.58 |
9-Aug-04/1:38 PM |
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Excellent Poem, captures lots of emotion in a seemingly harmless context. Well done.
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| Re: Reaction: Photo-Hung Over the Euphrates by eyrbare |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
9-Aug-04/3:09 PM |
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The title doesn't exactly invite one to read on, but once through the door, it's not bad going unless you're squeamish.
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| Re: Two Mirrors by Dovina |
unknown^user 68.107.136.25 |
9-Aug-04/7:23 PM |
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Bitter resignment. I only take slight issue with the isolation/cages metaphor. It's a little too overused.
Thought about starting a new stanza at "familiar smells"?
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| Re: A Letter to You by QuirkyWonder |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.13 |
8-Aug-04/9:49 AM |
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You're preaching to the choir. (check pikced)
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| Re: Torment From The Undead by XxRuby_KillsXx |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
8-Aug-04/12:38 PM |
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Oh, you gave yourself a 10 and me a 1. Okay, whatever.
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| Re: OLD AGE BLUES by massangel62 |
unknown^user 68.107.136.25 |
9-Aug-04/8:02 PM |
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"being ate"? You push those verb conjugations far enough and they'll scream at ya.
Rambling, and the ending is just plain cheesy. Plus, the rhyming is so rigid that there's no room for the rhythm to get off, but it still does.
Sorry.
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| Re: Punk Rock Christmas by unknown^user |
massangel62 64.12.116.70 |
9-Aug-04/11:35 PM |
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like you think your poem is the best? there are a lot of poems in here that people write that are way better than yours or mine put together. i just write cause i like to, it may not make sense to you but it makes sense to me and thats all that matters. i never said that i'm a real poet or that mine are any good, but your not any better. look at the language you use in your writing. your not even worth voting on.
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| Re: Certain circles by INTRANSIT |
eyrbare 64.33.190.67 |
9-Aug-04/9:43 AM |
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Loved this line: "The brother who breathes the color red from the gold filled barn to the American flag."
Very nice!
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| Re: A Letter to You by QuirkyWonder |
Prince of Void 217.218.131.152 |
8-Aug-04/12:42 AM |
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The nice poem ...i like it
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| Re: Los Angeles by Dovina |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.13 |
8-Aug-04/9:28 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
9-Aug-04/2:30 AM |
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It is of genuine concern to me that you have watched Blackadder and yet you have not at any time demonstrated an understanding of irony, sarcasm or wit. Indeed, as I sit here resplendent on my swivel chair in my splendid office watching my workers toil to squeeze out more money for my already amply full coffers, I am wiping away a tear as I consider the plain, confused look on your face as you consider why Baldrickâs cunning plans are called cunning as they always fail. -10-
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