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Stephen Robins 195.92.198.74 |
5-Aug-04/1:42 AM |
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The poem is brimming with the cadence of a well raped leg.
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| Re: Sugared Giraffes by Venus |
Stephen Robins 195.92.198.74 |
5-Aug-04/1:53 AM |
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"curiously evocative"
Mmmm - evokes a feeling of consternation and unsettled bow'ls in me.
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| Re: Mike Pike!! by DR Limerick |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
4-Aug-04/5:30 PM |
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Now mike is a collossal tripe.
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| Re: Mr. Stryker, Do You Really Want Some Kind of War? by cat |
wilco 66.162.22.123 |
5-Aug-04/11:00 AM |
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I think that this would be good if it was trimmed down some.
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INTRANSIT 205.188.116.70 |
5-Aug-04/6:44 AM |
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feel free to backhand me for being the dim I am.
Dic.com says one n for inamorato. 10 for teaching me latin.
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| Re: The huntsman's secret by Stephen Robins |
INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165 |
5-Aug-04/11:17 AM |
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Too bad neither one of us is bad enough to grace the worst list ,eh?
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| Re: Brats by D. $ Fontera |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
4-Aug-04/5:34 PM |
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We're all brats, aren't we?
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Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
4-Aug-04/5:28 PM |
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Kinda sweet really, family, but just enough distant. Like it.
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| Re: Mike Pike!! by DR Limerick |
frdup717 4.29.181.60 |
4-Aug-04/8:29 PM |
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because fish poon Mike really likes!
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wilco 66.162.22.123 |
5-Aug-04/10:48 AM |
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I think this would be stronger without the "usig the porn" part at the end. Up until there, very nice.
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wilco 66.162.22.123 |
5-Aug-04/10:55 AM |
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I just wanted to echo the fact that this writing style you've adopted is quite nice.
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Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
5-Aug-04/11:00 AM |
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I like the way you've shown the passage of time. First he's 40 and she's 10, then when she's 40, he's 70 and dead. And she's forever 10.
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Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.15 |
4-Aug-04/7:58 AM |
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Next, one on west nile? Good as limiricks go. A perfect DA tribute.-8-
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.135 |
4-Aug-04/6:10 PM |
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Hey great use of "nifty" to rhyme with "eternity", and "fast" to rhyme with... "ass"!!!!111 -10-
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Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.34 |
5-Aug-04/12:04 AM |
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Alfred Molina and you, too? Probably one of the few good poems to result from "Coffee and Cigarettes."
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INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165 |
5-Aug-04/10:22 AM |
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"Poetry is a search for syllables to shoot at the barriers of the known and the unknowable."
Carl Sandburg
I like this but it's too thin like weak iced tea.
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| Re: Marina by INTRANSIT |
Dan garcia-Black 66.159.217.34 |
4-Aug-04/11:54 PM |
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i think the masts are waiting and the fog is brushing. "Tall, waiting masts?" or is the fog waiting and brushing? Great images.
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| Re: Marina by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
4-Aug-04/5:25 PM |
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Sailboat waiting to sail or sailing though foggy. Like it.
Try "Peace that Passes Understanding" again and see if my explanation makes sense. I'd like to know.
Very little action on Poemranker today. I mean by users who don't call themselves "not Dovina."
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Stephen Robins 195.92.198.74 |
5-Aug-04/1:49 AM |
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A shitter poem I could not find,
If I searched VioletSuede's Behind!
A poem as gay as the shirt I lift,
As redundant and vacuous as Crystal Lane Swift!
A poem as loose as my ringpiece's slack,
A guff befitting Dan-Garcia-Black!
A heartfelt mess of unremitting shit,
As obviously gay as INTRANSIT.
OMGLOLTTM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1011010101010!!!!
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Dan garcia-Black 66.159.232.205 |
5-Aug-04/8:56 AM |
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