Re: Flying things by INTRANSIT	Dovina 24.52.157.176	23-Jul-04/3:11 PM
Try "fight" in line 9
Re: the secret language of clouds by fair12	Dovina 24.52.157.176	23-Jul-04/3:04 PM
Some good lines here and a good thought. I'd cull a few words - "though" in line 5, "over" in verse 4, speech
regarding some deleted poem...	Bachus 24.130.62.63	23-Jul-04/12:48 AM
"Meeting this boy has been a mircale" If I wasn't currently lashing my negro, I'd kiss you... you retarded plump bunny you.
Re: Flying things by INTRANSIT	Bachus 24.130.62.63	23-Jul-04/12:49 AM
you're high, weaponry... lol, you should see me PEE IN the snow.
Re: Heart Cancer by shit	Bachus 24.130.62.63	23-Jul-04/12:51 AM
This is a parody just begging to dance on your face.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bachus 24.130.62.63	23-Jul-04/12:44 AM
What you thought you were going TO LIVE FOREVER? Brilliant. 11!
Re: Wholes: the year in reflection by impert&ent	Bachus 24.130.62.63	23-Jul-04/12:45 AM
Gnarly
Re: Summer by Dovina	Bachus 24.130.62.63	23-Jul-04/12:46 AM
Last line would do better to rhyme as the first stanza did.
Re: The American Soldier by x0lovelylarnx0	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	23-Jul-04/1:34 AM
Mmmmm, two anonymous 10's from your IP address, well here is a very real 10 from me! with great work like this you don't need to cheat on the scoring ;¬) this is really mature :>/ and although some of the lines resemble the signatures on the toilet bowl of an indian restaurant:* this really does offer a very real insight into the workings of the modern world. Bravo. :¬}
Re: Terrorism Clean Up In Isle Three by Bachus	INTRANSIT 149.174.164.15	23-Jul-04/6:46 AM
To steal from U-2: " Throw a stone and hit someone guilty"
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 149.174.164.15	23-Jul-04/6:49 AM
Count Chocula? what?
Re: Wholes: the year in reflection by impert&ent	Dovina 24.52.157.176	23-Jul-04/10:34 AM
As you slip Between the lines - good line.
Re: The Poop Machines by dougsoderstrom	TAMARAG67 152.163.253.1	23-Jul-04/12:52 PM
i'm sorry i have to go take a crap, now
Re: The Poop Machines by dougsoderstrom	Dovina 24.52.157.176	23-Jul-04/2:52 PM
I thought You wanted to rise above this sort of wallow. And going back this far to take another dip. Disgusting.
Re: Girlz by liljsmith87	TAMARAG67 149.174.164.65	23-Jul-04/2:57 PM
it made me wince- i felt like it was written by an angry 13 year old with raging Jr.high hormones
Re: Wigging out by Jeremi B. Handrinos	TAMARAG67 149.174.164.65	23-Jul-04/3:06 PM
that bitch stole my wig.........
Re: A Mothers Heart by TAMARAG67	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.119.100	23-Jul-04/5:57 PM
I think the idea of filing something away would make a good smutty inuendo. Apart fromt that, tedious.
Re: the secret language of clouds by fair12	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.119.100	23-Jul-04/6:11 PM
Poorly articulated. E.g. rain is not particularly noted for starring blankly. And were you really smeared over some windows? I suspect you meant: We stared blankly, As rain smeared over windows, Each drop a sentence running away with our words.
regarding some deleted poem...	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.119.100	23-Jul-04/6:24 PM
Anyway, he was only saying that to get you to hoover the sand out of his crevices.
Re: Dan by dougsoderstrom	Dovina 24.52.157.176	23-Jul-04/6:49 PM
Now this is good, provocative. I like Dan, whom I didn't, but do, in spite of his shoe.