Re: Heart Cancer by shit	x0lovelylarnx0 64.12.116.140	21-Jul-04/4:48 PM
That was very touching.
regarding some deleted poem...	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.126.62	21-Jul-04/9:30 AM
A spherical towel?!
regarding some deleted poem...	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	21-Jul-04/10:42 PM
a bit much for me but good -8-
Re: Tears by QuirkyWonder	donmiguel1960 68.96.168.211	21-Jul-04/10:45 PM
Nice emotion
Re: The Two Temperaments of Man by dougsoderstrom	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.70	21-Jul-04/8:39 AM
I don't have these problems. I am a fence rider.
regarding some deleted poem...	x0lovelylarnx0 152.163.253.1	21-Jul-04/9:22 AM
Opps I thought I checked over it!
Re: Old Friends by sliver	x0lovelylarnx0 64.12.116.140	20-Jul-04/7:31 PM
I think the poem was nicely writen!
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.165	21-Jul-04/2:29 PM
What/who did this to you? My god.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.19.4	21-Jul-04/12:36 PM
oi vey...such a chubby this gives me.
Re: depressed by PhSbLoNdE569	tori 67.51.98.207	21-Jul-04/10:35 PM
hey! and u say MY poems are depressing??? lol its a very good expression of w.e u are feeling! and heres a 9
Re: Tears by QuirkyWonder	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 217.42.186.254	21-Jul-04/5:54 PM
Your complete lack of punctuation does you credit. And the lines "Your gentle hand / Is the only healing of this treasure" have stained my rosy cheeks with tears, not for sorrow, but of happiness beyond the imagination. Actually, the best part is where you talk about not having to see things with your eyes, because you have memorized them with your mind. Now I'm going to type something with my fingers, which I want you to look at with your eyes, then assimilate with your mind, then say with your mouth, and then hear with your ears: -=AIDS=-
Re: In prison I live, by donmiguel1960	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 217.42.186.254	21-Jul-04/6:13 PM
What? You weep with great sorrow for a crushed leaf? Good one. As useless as cracks in a stone? Are cracks in stones really that useless? Yes, yes I suppose they are. But no more useless than cracks in just about anything. Certainly not so useless that I would remark upon their uselessness in casual conversation, perhaps likening them, as you have done, to other useless objects. If you're going to say something is useless, you may as well liken it to something genuinely useless. Like your face.
Re: Feeling Like A Mask by wilco	Dovina 24.52.157.176	20-Jul-04/2:39 PM
Might want to scratch "Feeling Like" from the title. "I’m masquerading as someone who loves you." "Not technically lies." Good lines.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	21-Jul-04/12:55 AM
That is filthy Crystal - there isn't a single word listed which doesn't carry some overt sexual message. My favourite words are wetter and choke and curd.
Re: The Dream by x0lovelylarnx0	Prince of Void 217.218.131.140	21-Jul-04/3:53 AM
That was good
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.70	21-Jul-04/5:43 AM
Interesting picture. Technically: Heavy/oppressive seems redundant and a little cliche. Drop the "but not exactly" again, redundnt against almost laughing. Finally, -up in- upon may be better. Something about the storm and the village traders having a connection. Eeees goot.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.19.4	21-Jul-04/7:18 AM
great screen name. i have no fucking clue about the poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.244.171	21-Jul-04/7:52 AM
The line 'the words he said next were awesomely new' and the spelling of mirical makes you appear a dunce. But credit for posting a terza rima, it seems to work and the lyrical/spherical rhyme is refreshingly unexpected.
Re: Depth of Void by Prince of Void	x0lovelylarnx0 64.12.116.140	21-Jul-04/8:27 AM
Awesome Poem!
regarding some deleted poem...	x0lovelylarnx0 152.163.253.1	21-Jul-04/8:33 AM
There wasn't enought syllables in each line . It supposed to be 10 in each. The scheme was wrong. It's ABA BCB CDC DED EE.