Re: Mm, Shoes... ? by fevriere	Dovina 24.52.157.176	9-Jul-04/4:13 PM
Not much better on rewrite. What really are you trying to say?
Re: Innocence Having Been Lost by dougsoderstrom	boldsilence 68.11.251.86	9-Jul-04/6:18 PM
I don't entirely agree with it, but I'm not judging you're opinion, I'm judging the poem, and the poem isn't that bad.
Re: Friends Forever? by nicole081083	electroman1979 198.81.26.16	9-Jul-04/9:52 PM
i like it, good poem
Re: Crazy about you by nicole081083	electroman1979 198.81.26.16	9-Jul-04/9:54 PM
good work, keep it up
Re: A whispered cry by donmiguel1960	electroman1979 198.81.26.16	9-Jul-04/9:57 PM
deep thoughts, very emotional, -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	9-Jul-04/11:19 PM
El trains are noisy and dirty. Finding flowers in their sparks is like admiring the moonlight reflecting in a pool of urine. Good.
Re: Friends Forever? by nicole081083	New Life Drug 69.106.240.249	10-Jul-04/12:02 AM
the wrong is a bad place to be
regarding some deleted poem...	New Life Drug 69.106.240.249	10-Jul-04/12:03 AM
feckleheads. mmmmmmmm
regarding some deleted poem...	New Life Drug 69.106.240.249	10-Jul-04/12:04 AM
good diction? o wait its all made up.
Re: Brando's Dead (slight reprise) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	New Life Drug 69.106.240.249	10-Jul-04/12:06 AM
fuck no
regarding some deleted poem...	New Life Drug 69.106.240.249	10-Jul-04/12:07 AM
thats one way
Re: The Ladies and the Bum by Dovina	New Life Drug 69.106.240.249	10-Jul-04/12:08 AM
lackadaisical. im so glad you had a chance to use that
Re: Tweenager, they're called now. by fevriere	New Life Drug 69.106.240.249	10-Jul-04/12:14 AM
ohhhhhhhhhh
regarding some deleted poem...	New Life Drug 69.106.240.249	10-Jul-04/12:16 AM
that is the most expensive/valuable thing to buy...except hookers dont give love. they give the opposite. and what about "can't buy me love" can love really be "bought" i sure hope not. i doubt it. bleh.
Re: What Now? Bitch! by D. $ Fontera	New Life Drug 69.106.240.249	10-Jul-04/12:18 AM
sure
Re: Just A Day by nothingtoanyone	PunkyPanda 64.12.116.140	9-Jul-04/4:52 PM
Very very very creative, Audrey, love ya to Hell<3
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.242.35	9-Jul-04/3:11 PM
The delivery is a touch fluffed, but I like the concept.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	9-Jul-04/3:18 PM
Money is a medium of exchange and a measure of wealth. If you wish to place "love" in money's place and write about it, that's a good idea. But some precision of language is needed to make the point.
Re: Mm, Shoes... ? by fevriere	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.73.98	9-Jul-04/4:07 PM
The title promises shoes, but the poem only disappoints. To me, there is nothing more erotic than a cardboard box full of sweaty trainers.
Re: Somber Like My Pain by TwilightDawned	?-Dave_Mysterious-? 80.42.73.98	9-Jul-04/4:11 PM
I can only assume, given that you have spelled Splinter with a capital S, that you are referring to Splinter off of the Turtles. But what sight could be so horrible that it would make your head literally turn into Splinter off of the Turtles? This poem really doesn't stand up to scrutiny.