Re: Fishy Blob by MR Blobby	MR Blobby 62.31.24.189	29-Jun-04/12:14 PM
fish off!!
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	29-Jun-04/1:29 PM
"Mr Bloom walked unheeded along his grove by saddened angels, crosses, broken pillars, family vaults, stone hopes praying with upcast eyes, old Ireland's hearts and hands. More sensible to spend the money on some charity for the living." There, a piece of Joyce is read, probably enough. I'll start on the bathroom light, then sort by author. By the time you're back from the hospital, we'll be nearly done.
Re: I Am The Wolf of the Steppes by versus_u	Lifeboatman 63.243.177.254	29-Jun-04/3:38 PM
10... always a delight...
Re: To A Debaucherous Lover by versus_u	Lifeboatman 63.243.177.254	29-Jun-04/3:39 PM
8 dear.. delicious isn't it.. but it's not good
Re: afraid by hbhpoems	Bachus 24.130.62.63	29-Jun-04/3:46 PM
FOAM!!!
Re: Titleist and Socrates by MacFrantic	Bachus 24.130.62.63	29-Jun-04/3:51 PM
Somewhere, sometime, somehow Dudley Moore just queefed.
Re: Stepperstapper by FreeFormFixation	Bachus 24.130.62.63	29-Jun-04/3:58 PM
I can Waltz on Walter.
Re: Revision by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.144	29-Jun-04/9:16 AM
Sounds like a lover's quarrel with this site. In that spirit, You're telling me not showing me. Who made that reprobate Bukowski god? In line 5 try replacing dismayed with repulsed (what is the opposite of seduced?).-9-
Re: Captain Napkin Starring In "The Passion Of Napkin" by horus8	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.144	29-Jun-04/9:02 AM
Cute.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	29-Jun-04/9:05 AM
I seems like a good start of something.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	29-Jun-04/9:16 AM
Yes, on singing your heart out. Like the irony of fools doing it too, or only, who cares. Nice.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.144	29-Jun-04/9:31 AM
"assume big joy and nothing at all" great line. A flat ball. A wet newspaper. Some broken glass. My daughter All things ruined? As the poem continues, I feel resolution approaching. The end confirms my feelings. It lit the gasoline fumes and exploded for me. I think I need a cigarette. -10-
Re: Titleist and Socrates by MacFrantic	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.144	29-Jun-04/9:51 AM
Fun to imagine as one reads, sees the threesome walking along, the caddy asking question after question while Tiger gets annoyed and Ari smiles at his old teacher's complete lack of golf etiquette.
Re: Black streets of Hackney by cpill	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.144	29-Jun-04/10:01 AM
Do you think "The Clash" was at fault? Hard to decipher.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.144	29-Jun-04/10:04 AM
I hear it saying that it's OK to be alone. -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	Bachus 24.130.62.63	29-Jun-04/11:28 AM
Beneccio Del Torro in Dr. Spankenstein With special guest appearances by Captain Napkin and Willy The Wily Weevil.
Re: The Poem Without an End Working Towards the Beginning by TheVoiceless	Quarton 12.217.221.61	29-Jun-04/11:30 AM
This is mostly incoherent and rambles too much. Did you write it as a stream consciousness? (James Joyce wrote Ulysses with this technique) Perhaps you might take this and shorten for I believe it has some good ideas and concepts. I like the concept of no end in searching for the beginning. An example for the last line: "The end becomes infinite in my quest for the beginning" I do like the line: "Something to lay my mind to rest, giving it reason to ease." Quite lovely and consider deleting the obscenities. They, IMO, detract from the poem and its potential.
Re: Artist's Child by conan the grammarian	hbhpoems 134.241.46.66	29-Jun-04/11:38 AM
Great start to your poem. If possible add more detail. I am working on detail in my poems as well. Keep the work up.
regarding some deleted poem...	hbhpoems 134.241.46.66	29-Jun-04/11:44 AM
Aswomse Poem I am adding to my faviotes. Check out Afaid and little girl if you can.
Re: afraid by hbhpoems	MR Blobby 62.31.24.189	29-Jun-04/12:13 PM
blobby blob