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SupremeDreamer 66.52.131.136 |
22-Jun-04/2:49 PM |
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Not too bad, though it lacks some vigor and could have been shortened and worded better, it's worthy of a seven.
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some deleted user 24.69.255.205 |
22-Jun-04/2:49 PM |
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well man im jus writing wuti m feelin ya know man dont go hating on me cause u dont like it , i mean if thats wut u think obviously ur not a fan of rap r u ?
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SupremeDreamer 204.31.169.88 |
22-Jun-04/3:19 PM |
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Such a thing is lost only when one believes that it is unrecoverable.
Blessed with eight.
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| Re: Niggers Don't Write Poetry by pain killer |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
22-Jun-04/4:43 PM |
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Axle Rose rocked, before the weave and beads.
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| Re: Skuld Resurrected by SupremeDreamer |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
22-Jun-04/4:42 PM |
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pain killer 217.159.74.253 |
22-Jun-04/2:06 PM |
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oh zodiac, get over yourself will you
wibble
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| Re: The Little Girl by Torok |
MR Blobby 62.31.23.167 |
22-Jun-04/2:12 PM |
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| Re: Niggers Don't Write Poetry by pain killer |
MR Blobby 62.31.23.167 |
22-Jun-04/2:18 PM |
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titan69 62.31.23.167 |
22-Jun-04/2:22 PM |
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THIS IS A REALY GOOD POEM I CARNT BELEAVE NO ONE
HAS COMMENTED ON IT keep up the good work!!
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wilco 24.176.102.131 |
22-Jun-04/2:26 PM |
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Definitely has a haunting feel to it. Something about S3 bothers me, but I'm not sure what it is. I'll have to give it a few more reads. Here's a 9.
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| Re: Getting the Cool Kids To Like Me by the codeine kid |
titan69 62.31.23.167 |
22-Jun-04/2:26 PM |
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Yer right on!
good to see you back!
kid?
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| Re: Headstone by ayatollahshawn |
titan69 62.31.23.167 |
22-Jun-04/2:28 PM |
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| Re: Niggers Don't Write Poetry by pain killer |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
22-Jun-04/2:29 PM |
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Who are these people? Why would using the word "nigger" give them "cred"? I'll give you a 3 because I'm intrigued, but you're going to have to explain more if you want a good vote.
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horus8 24.130.62.63 |
22-Jun-04/4:40 PM |
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Now you have something in common with niggers besides that gold-tooth and cocked cap.
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| Re: Blob??****(blob)&& by MR Blobby |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
22-Jun-04/4:41 PM |
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| Re: I care 4 you by jessicasgurl |
jessicasgurl 24.118.251.83 |
22-Jun-04/6:31 PM |
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hey yall i think that this one is by best that i have posted and i would like yalls oppinion on thank yall
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jessicasgurl 24.118.251.83 |
22-Jun-04/1:17 PM |
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this a true poem i love it and its so true and all but they can write poems good like this one is awsome
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| Re: Skuld Resurrected by SupremeDreamer |
god'swife 4.233.113.83 |
22-Jun-04/1:20 PM |
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The last four stanza I love.
In the first stanza you write
The quiet hum of the words
seem to fade into
each other in ...
Yuo can't say that, 'The quiet hum...seem to...', you see you continuing the sentence as if the subject was 'words' but it's not, it's 'hum'. 'words' is the subject of the preposition.
The quiet hum of words fading
into each other.
Or something like that.
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| Re: Niggers Don't Write Poetry by pain killer |
jessicasgurl 24.118.251.83 |
22-Jun-04/1:21 PM |
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thanx i seen you liked my poem thanx alot ur sweet but holla i gotta bounce up out of this peace
PE@CE OUT
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| Re: I Shall Fight by Torok |
Shuushin 147.154.235.51 |
22-Jun-04/1:26 PM |
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I like this (well, no crazy about the lowercase "i"'s) - for me it stays on the right side of honest introspection.
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