| Re: RosalÃa de Castro: When I was born by Sasha |
Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
21-Jun-04/2:36 PM |
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.135 |
21-Jun-04/2:21 PM |
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How delightful! And brimming with innuendo, too! Like "bounding balls"! And "uterus"!
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Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
21-Jun-04/2:33 PM |
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| Re: "She Phoned This Morning" by ARTIE |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
21-Jun-04/2:35 PM |
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Good, but I'd like to see you expand it. The "soul doth yearn" thing is a bit (very) old school, but hey, whatever floats your boat.
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wilco 24.176.102.131 |
21-Jun-04/2:39 PM |
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This is one of you're better ones that I've read but the rhymes are very forced. Maybe try writing it without the rhymes.
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wilco 24.176.102.131 |
21-Jun-04/2:42 PM |
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I thought this was pretty good up until the "online...instant messages. I think if you get rid of that part and maybe reword some of the ending, you'll really have something here.
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| Re: "She Phoned This Morning" by ARTIE |
ARTIE 66.68.146.139 |
21-Jun-04/3:04 PM |
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"doth", "do'eth", "does"; I chose "doth" just because...er...well... I used to read a lot of Shakespeare's sonnets. Ok, maybe it is a little out of date. Thanks for your inputs.
This will be a work in progress as I really liked the way this first stanza turned out. I'll have her call again soon and inspire me toward more.
Stay tuned.....
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ARTIE 66.68.146.139 |
21-Jun-04/3:12 PM |
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Schizopoda or Macuran, touche! never the less. One of your best.
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wilco 24.176.102.131 |
21-Jun-04/3:33 PM |
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| Re: 5/22 by aburiedlife |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
21-Jun-04/3:36 PM |
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I don't get these people placing their own poems on their favorites list. You have a whole page of your own with all your poems listed there, all neat and tidy.
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wilco 24.176.102.131 |
21-Jun-04/3:37 PM |
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zodiac 65.161.41.48 |
21-Jun-04/11:11 AM |
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This is the most amazingly astute poem ever.
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zodiac 65.161.41.48 |
21-Jun-04/11:14 AM |
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Oddly, the worst part of this is
"She wants my wedding ring. I still miss
his name.
To do it all again, to savor the pain,"
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| Re: Center Of The Universe by Dovina |
zodiac 65.161.41.48 |
21-Jun-04/11:17 AM |
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The rule that "each small life Feels itself the center of the universe," while a generally good one, probably does not apply to insects, mollusks, or the aboriginal races.
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| Re: Quiet, Kind Hills by Dovina |
MacFrantic 198.81.26.16 |
21-Jun-04/11:57 AM |
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Wholesome house-building goodness. *9*
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Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
21-Jun-04/1:20 PM |
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| Re: Quiet, Kind Hills by Dovina |
Shardik 24.130.62.63 |
21-Jun-04/1:46 PM |
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This sounded like this porno parody of that movie the "Hours" I watched the other day, it was called the "Showers".
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| Re: RosalÃa de Castro: When I was born by Sasha |
titan69 62.31.28.227 |
21-Jun-04/1:47 PM |
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I just dont know where you get these poems from you must have a great mind!!
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titan69 62.31.28.227 |
21-Jun-04/1:52 PM |
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well im not quite shore about this one did i see some
rude words in this poem?
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titan69 62.31.28.227 |
21-Jun-04/2:00 PM |
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Is this a story about you and the visitors comeing
to see you in your loony bin?
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