regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.16.192	14-Jun-04/5:50 PM
Time to move on.
regarding some deleted poem...	Amber 63.189.16.192	14-Jun-04/6:00 PM
I'm sure you miss her very much. At least you got to say goodby.
Re: Lost by arduinn	titan69 62.31.23.45	14-Jun-04/12:48 PM
I like this i can picture what you are saying 9/10
Re: Fighting before bed by zodiac	Doug 205.188.116.140	14-Jun-04/12:50 PM
crass nomenclature,wow you are such a wordy gimp.
Re: In love as in war by zodiac	Doug 205.188.116.140	14-Jun-04/1:20 PM
Jimmy,maybe write about what you know,instead of this sad little fantasy of jerking off a man in uniform. It seems clear you know nothing of war or love(or writing a decent poem).Oh and your music sucks as well.
Re: The Stickmen of Fools by embersandenvelopes	wilco 24.176.102.131	14-Jun-04/2:07 PM
I'm not sure exactly what's going on here, but I like the imagery.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.16.192	14-Jun-04/5:43 PM
superb, well done. I like how you refer to the heroes in the train more directly now
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.16.192	14-Jun-04/5:43 PM
Can you e-mail me the original so I can see the steps you took to revise?
Re: Stick orgy by Bobjim_returns	TLRufener 24.158.7.169	14-Jun-04/6:16 PM
Entertaining.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.189.16.192	14-Jun-04/5:48 PM
I set out to write that perfect poem once also. It must not have done it, she's gone.
Re: Lost by arduinn	god'swife 4.232.210.23	14-Jun-04/7:17 PM
You write poems that sound like Yoda, or I should say, like Yoda sounds, poems you write.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 4.232.69.69	14-Jun-04/7:26 PM
From the dark tunnel...a raindrop was felt? I like the last couplet, and the raindrops.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 4.232.69.69	14-Jun-04/7:29 PM
Was this written at a fish&chips ? The image here is ridiculous.
Re: Big wave by DR Limerick	god'swife 4.232.69.69	14-Jun-04/7:37 PM
Excellent.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 4.232.69.69	14-Jun-04/7:40 PM
Nice image. Do yuo ever try playing around with the words?
Re: You and I by Lifeboatman	god'swife 4.232.69.69	14-Jun-04/7:49 PM
This poem suffers from verbal dysenteria. Take two aspirins and shoot me in the morning.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 4.232.69.69	14-Jun-04/8:10 PM
Fucking great. I'm shocked. Get rid of 'by someone'.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 4.232.69.69	14-Jun-04/8:15 PM
Also it should be 'my ability' not 'and ability'. "I hope there is no question" You don't need 'THAT' in the sentence. "The happiness I am sure I have never known'.(Why is evryone in love with the word THAT? My son stopped making THAT mistake at age 7). I especially like the last line because you say I could fall in love, when you already have.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 4.232.69.69	14-Jun-04/8:16 PM
Get out more.
regarding some deleted poem...	god'swife 4.232.69.69	14-Jun-04/8:18 PM
Better the first time.